题目内容
【题目】假如你是李华,在校报英语专栏看到有关“英语文化节”的一则招募启事。阅读启事,并根据要求写一封应征邮件。
Volunteers Wanted
Our annual English Festival, which will be held on March 15-17, is now looking for 20 student volunteers to provide service for Talent Show, Speech Contest, and English Debate. If you are interested, please send an application email to Ms. Chen at chenlaoshiaef.com.
Volunteers Wanted
Our annual English Festival, which will be held on March 15-17, is now looking for 20 student volunteers to provide service for Talent Show, Speech Contest, and English Debate. If you are interested, please send an application email to Ms. Chen at chenlaoshiaef.com.
写作要求:1. 表达写信意图;陈述应征目的;说明应征条件(性格、能力等);
2. 开头已写好,不计入总词数;
3. 可根据情况增加细节,使行文连贯;
4. 词数100词左右。
Dear Ms. Chen,
I’m Li Hua, a student from Class 2, Grade 3. ____________________________________________________
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Looking forward to your reply.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Ms. Chen,
I’m Li Hua, a student from Class2, Grade 3. I’m writing to apply for the position as a student volunteer.
I really want to obtain this precious opportunity because, by offering my service, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public.
As an outgoing girl, I get along well with my classmates. Besides, I have such a good command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher. Successfully, I have lent a helping hand to her in several English activities of my class, which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates.
I am sure that I can perfectly live up to your expectations. I would appreciate it if you could take my application into account.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours truly,
Li Hua
【解析】
这篇书面表达属于应用文,要求写一封邮件。
第一步:要审题,审题的目的是获取重要信息。如通过题目我们可以确定几个方面的信息。第一、表达写信意图;陈述应征目的;说明应征条件(性格、能力等)。第二、人称为第一人称。第三、时态为一般现在时,兼用现在完成时和一般将来时。
第二步:布局段落,确定主要段落,次要段落,段落数量。这篇写作段落是五段,第一段主要是引题,表达写信意图。第二段陈述应征目的。第三段说明应征条件(性格、能力等。第四段写明自己的期望。第五段写期待回信。其中第二段,第三段为重点段落。
第三步:确定关键词汇和短语:improve my organizational ability,communication skills ,my confidence in speaking English in public,outgoing ,get along well with ,I have such a good command of, assistant ,live up to .
第四步:确定较为高级的句子:because, by offering my service, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public. which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates. I have such a good command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher . I would appreciate it if you could take my application into account.
第五步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连接词进行过渡衔接:As an outgoing girl, Besides, Successfully.
第六步:注意书写,保持卷面整洁,避免划线,乱擦。
【亮点说明】
文章思路清晰,语言规范,段落整齐,语篇连贯,层次清晰。使用了较为高级的句式如:because, by offering my service, I will be able to improve my organizational ability, communication skills as well as my confidence in speaking English in public. which have been appreciated by both teachers and classmates. I have such a good command of English that I am elected as assistant to my English teacher . I would appreciate it if you could take my application into account.
高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次。整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。