Question

【题目】书面表达

随着期末考试临近，许多家长用金钱、旅游等承诺鼓励孩子努力学习，以后考入好大学。假定你是高二学生李华，请根据所提供的有关信息，给某英文报社写封短信。

内容要点：

1. 许多家长用金钱、旅游等承诺鼓励孩子努力学习，以后考入好大学；

2. 可能会导致学生只关注物质奖励，而减少学习乐趣；

3. 一旦获得想要的奖励就失去了学习动力；

4. 你的建议。

注意：

1. 不要逐词逐句地翻译。

2. 为使语句连贯，可以适当增加细节。

3. 词数100左右。短信开头和结尾已给出，不计入总数。

Dear Editor,

With the final examination approaching,__________________________

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Yours truly

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Editor,

With the final examination approaching, many parents try to encourage their children to study hard and be admitted into a famous university in the near future. They promise that they will be rewarded with things such as money, traveling and so on once they achieve the goals.

However, I don't think this is a proper way. Firstly, it may lead to the fact that children's attention will focus on such things instead of the pleasure of studying. Secondly, they may stop working hard as soon as they get what they want.

I think a wise way is to make us aware of the importance of going to a good university. We should also study hard and well for our future.

Yours truly

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本书面表达是一篇提纲作文。提纲作文写作的时候注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。

【亮点说明】范文中运用一些常用短语：be admitted into意为：被···录取；be rewarded with意为：被回报···；be aware of 意为：明白···，知道···；除此之外还运用了一些高级句式，例如：With the final examination approaching,这里使用了with的复合结构；it may lead to the fact that children's attention will focus on such things instead of the pleasure of studying.这里面包含了一个同位语从句。另外，范文还恰当地运用了过渡词语，这些都是值得学习的亮点。