Question

【题目】书面表达

假如你是李华，你的朋友Peter来信谈到他渴望和别人交流，渴望得到别人或给予别人帮助，但他感到交友困难。请你给他写一封信，提出你的建议。要点如下：

1、和别人交流是一个好的想法，每个人都有和别人交流的愿望；

2、你应该主动找别人沟通；

3、当别人遇到困难时，你要提供力所能及的帮助；

4、友谊需要长期的培养。

注意1.词数120左右。

2. 信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总字数。

Dear Peter,

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.

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Yours ever,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Peter,

It is a good idea to communicate and make friends with others. Nobody is unwilling to have friends in the world . To win real friendship , my opinions are as follows .

Firstly, you’d better offer to say hello to others. With a smile on your face, you are more attractive. The student sitting next to you is most likely to become your friend because there are more chances for you to communicate with him or her.

Secondly, try to lend a hand to people when they are in need of help .

Finally, you should know it will take a long time to build friendship . you should also be aware that not all friendships work out. If someone doesn’t want to be friends, move on to someone else. It is good to have friends who have their own ideas and opinions. Don’t expect everyone to be just like you.

I hope it will be of some help to you.

Best wishes.

Yours ever,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇提纲类书面表达，文章的要点也基本上都给出来了，而且很具体，考生要把要点解释清楚，不能有遗漏。除了表达这些要点以外，还要给出自己的建议，这就要求考生自己拓展发挥，在写作的过程中，要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型，如强调句，倒装句等，让文章更上档次。同时在列举措施的时候要使用合适的连接词如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，让文章看起来很有条理，也很流畅。本篇文章在写作时不要啰嗦，力求简洁。

【亮点说明】所给范文语言简洁，运用了一些词组和句子：say hello to打招呼，next to，communicate with交流，lend a hand to伸出援手，in need of，take a long time to，be aware，work out，move on，It is a good idea to communicate and make friends with others以及It is good to have friends who have their own ideas and opinions运用了形式主语，because there are more chances for you to communicate with him or her.because引导的从句以及there are句型，还有文章还使用了Firstly, Secondly, Finally,这样的关联词，使文章更加连贯。