Question

19．请你以高三学生李华的署名给校长发一封电子邮件，感谢学校三年来对你的培养和教育，并向学校提出如下建议：
1．学校教学应该注重学生学习方法的培养
2．学校应该丰富学生的校园生活
注意：你可以适当发挥，但不能透漏你和你们学校的真实信息．
Dear Principal
I'm writing this letter to you to talk about my view on the teaching methods．In my opinion，school should focus more on nurturing students'personality and characteristics rather than academic results．（高分句型一）The school should instill correct values by giving more lessons on core traditional values．Moreover，I believe that the school should organize more activities for students to join．（高分句型二）For example，there can be more clubs and hobby groups，so that students can select those extra lessons based on their interest．I hope you will listen to my advice and build a great school environment．（高分句型三）Thank you．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息请你以高三学生李华的署名给校长发一封电子邮件，感谢学校三年来对你的培养和教育，并向学校提出如下建议．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：学校教学应该注重学生学习方法的培养；学校应该丰富学生的校园生活；2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：talk about谈论；In my opinion以我的观点来看；focus  on关注；rather than而不是；Moreover而且；based on以…为根据；
In my opinion，school should focus more on nurturing students'personality and characteristics rather than academic results．（高分句型一）
Moreover，I believe that the school should organize more activities for students to join．（高分句型二）
I hope you will listen to my advice and build a great school environment．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Principal，
      I'm writing this letter to you to talk about my view on the teaching methods．In my opinion，school should focus more on nurturing students'personality and characteristics rather than academic results．（高分句型一）The school should instill correct values by giving more lessons on core traditional values．Moreover，I believe that the school should organize more activities for students to join．（高分句型二）For example，there can be more clubs and hobby groups，so that students can select those extra lessons based on their interest．I hope you will listen to my advice and build a great school environment．（高分句型三）Thank you．
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．