Question

7．某英文报刊开辟专栏，讨论高中生的周末安排．请你结合你校学生实际，按以
下提示，用英文为该专栏写一篇稿件．

普遍现象	1．全天看电视、上网聊天、玩游戏…； 2．无暇与家人沟通交流； 3．边上网边吃零食，不吃正餐．
你的观点	1．在家比在校更疲劳； 2．失去与父母交流的机会； 3．…
你的建议	…

注意：
1．词数120左右．开头已为你写好，不计入总词数．
2．根据所给提示，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3．文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称．
At present，when senior high school students get weekends off，many of my classmates spend all day．

Answer 1

分析 提纲作文应该按所要求的内容来写，根据所列的内容尽量以简明扼要的语言来表达．这篇作文要求较灵活，比如自己好的学习习惯应是能够提高学习效果的，不好的学习习惯会阻碍学习的．写作时要注意适当地使用关联词承前启后，用词要得体，符合语言环境．
文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少  还运用了定语从句which requires one to plan carefully．等．并注意了句子的衔接如：first of all，For besides，thirdlyl等．
亮点句型一：As we all know，wattching TV，playing games and chatting on the Internet all day are bad for us．我们都知道，整天看电视，玩游戏和在网上聊天对我们是有害的．这是一个由关系代词as引导的非限制性定语从句，as可以置于句首，翻译成"正如大家所了解的"as指代整个句子的内容．
 亮点句型二：Besides，they probably lose the chance of sharing their life with their parents，which makes them not understand each other well．此外，他们可能失去了与父母分享生活的机会，这让他们彼此不太了解．which makes them not understand each other well是一个非限制性定语从句，关系代词which指代整个主句的内容．

解答 At present，when senior high school students get weekends off，many of my classmates spend all day waching TV，chatting and playing computer games on the Internet．So they are too busy to communicate with their parents．What's more，they have enough time to eat meals but some junk food and snacks．
 As we all know，watching TV，playing games and chatting on the Internet all day are bad for us．（亮点句型一）First of all，some of my classmates may be even more tired at home than  at school．Besides，they probably lose the chance of sharing their life with their parents，which makes them not understand each other well．（亮点句型二）Thirdly，it is certain that eating the junk food and snacks is harmful to health．．【阐明现象】
In my opinion，we should spend less time in front of the TV or the computer．To make ourselves relaxed，we can go out to take some exercise and do some sports．We‘d better spend as much time as we can with friends and family members who love us．And we need enough sleep and have a healthy diet to keep fit．【表明观点】

点评 本文属于提纲作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果．