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19．毕业季也是感恩季，来自澳大利亚的Feinstein在她的网站上发起感谢信接力的活动．假设你是红星中学高三学生李华，请写一封感谢信参加接力，内容包括：
1．感谢的人或事物；
2．感谢的原因；
3．你的美好愿望．
注意：词数不少于50．
Dear，
I am writing to you to let you know how lucky I am to have you as a teacher．From day one，I enjoyed each and every class of yours．You could always make your lessons informative，educational and enjoyable all at the same time．Every day I looked forward to your class，which was a surprise from a student who hated and dreaded English．It was you who awakened my interest in English and restored my confidence in myself．I enjoyed everything you taught us，from the English language to American culture．The smell of the pancakes we made together in your class is still clear in our minds，and it simply makes my mouth water．
You are a special teacher whom I will always remember with fond memories．You are a great inspiration to us all!
A big and warm"Thank you!"from your beloved student!May you continue to inspire greatness in all of your students!（157 words）

Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息请写一封感谢信参加接力，写作时注意以下几点：1、感谢的人或事物；感谢的原因；你的美好愿望．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态，就本文而言应该用一般现在时态并结合部分一般过去时．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
（高分句型一）You could always make your lessons informative，educational and enjoyable all at the same time．
该句型使用了make+宾语+宾语补足语，informative，educational and enjoyable 三个形容词做宾语补足语；
（高分句型二）It was you who awakened my interest in English and restored my confidence in myself．
  该句使用了强调句It was you who…强调主语you； 
（高分句型三） You are a special teacher whom I will always remember with fond memories．
该句式使用了whom引导定语从句，whom充当宾语；
高级词汇：informative，educational and enjoyable 有信息的、教育的、有乐趣的；awaken唤醒；inspire激励；

解答 Dear Samantha，
    I am writing to you to let you know how lucky I am to have you as a teacher．From day one，I enjoyed each and every class of yours．（高分句型一）You could always make your lessons informative，educational and enjoyable all at the same time．Every day I looked forward to your class，which was a surprise from a student who hated and dreaded English．（高分句型二）It was you who awakened my interest in English and restored my confidence in myself．I enjoyed everything you taught us，from the English language to American culture．The smell of the pancakes we made together in your class is still clear in our minds，and it simply makes my mouth water．
   （高分句型三） You are a special teacher whom I will always remember with fond memories．You are a great inspiration to us all!
   A big and warm"Thank you!"from your beloved student!May you continue to inspire greatness in all of your students!（157 words）
                                                                                                 Yours，
                                                                                                  Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．