Question

12．近年来，食品安全事件频频曝光，食品安全问题成为人们关注的成为人们焦点．最近，某网站的一个论坛正在就这个问题展开讨论，请你也来参与这个讨论，谈谈你对这一问题的看法．
你的讨论需包括：
食品安全问题的现状
产生这一问题的原因
解决这一问题的建议．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
Second，the overuse of agricultural pesticide has some bad effect on food quality．
高分句型二：
Furthermore，some food producers inject hormones into domestic animals so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit．
句型一 the overuse of agricultural pesticide has some bad effect on food quality 该句子的谓语部分使用了一个重要的短语：have an…effect on sth 对．．有重要影响
句型二 so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit．该部分使用了so as to 位于句尾，作目的状语
此外，本文还使用了以下高级词汇和短语：all in all 总之 as a result 结果

解答 Currently，many problems concerning the safety of food have caused much attention．As for me，I believe at least three factors account for this issue．
   First，I observe that profits drive many food producers to commit illegal things．They aim to gain more money at the expense of consumers'health．Second，the overuse of agricultural pesticide has some bad effect on food quality．（高分句型一）The execssive pesticide bears enormous health risk for people．Furthermore，some food producers inject hormones into domestic animals so as to make them grow more quickly and thus they can turn in more profit．（高分句型二） As a result，people's health has been seriously disturbed．（分析原因）
   All in all，food safety is such a great concern，and we all should estabilsh laws and implement them effectively to avoid producing posisonous foods．（提出建议）

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