Question

11．"世界上最遥远的距离不是生与死，而是我在你面前，你却在低头玩手机"．这个网络上流行的说法正是很多人真实生活的写照．一项网络调查显示，许多中国人自清晨至深夜一天都有手机相伴，"手机依赖症"已经成为社会"流行病"．
1．描述这一现象；
2．分析其原因及弊端
3．你认为该如何改变这种现状．
注意：1．词数100左右；
      2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
                                                                                    

Answer 1

分析 （高分句型一） As is often the case，when people are attending meetings，having meals or waiting for buses，you can always find them addicted to their phones，completely ignoring others．
As is often the case…该句型是as引导的非限制性定语从句；还使用了when引导的时间状语从句；find sb addicted to 发现某人沉迷于…；ignoring others为现在分词做状语表示伴随．
（高分句型二）The reason is that smart phones nowadays enable people to play mobile games and keep in touch with friends through QQ and Wechat．
the reason is that…使用了that引导的一个表语从句；
（高分句型三）Moreover，people addicted to their phones fail to communicate well with those around them in the real world．
该句型使用了addicted to…短语做people的定语，表示沉迷于手机的人．
重点短语：be addicted to沉迷于；a common phenomenon 一个普遍的现象；keep in touch with 于…保持联系；
过渡词：Moreover表示递进；However表转折；Meanwhile 与此同时．

解答 （高分句型一） As is often the case，when people are attending meetings，having meals or waiting for buses，you can always find them addicted to their phones，completely ignoring others．
    This is really a common phenomenon in our life．（高分句型二）The reason is that smart phones nowadays enable people to play mobile games and keep in touch with friends through QQ and Wechat．However，too much exposure to phones is bad for people in terms of health．（高分句型三）Moreover，people addicted to their phones fail to communicate well with those around them in the real world．
     As far as I am concerned，people should wisely make use of their phones to help with their work and study．Meanwhile care more about their family and friends rather than mobile phones．

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．