题目内容
【题目】假如你是李华,你的美国笔友Dan Friedell来信向你介绍了西方饮食的特点(高热、高脂、高糖)。同时他想了解中国饮食的特点。请给他写封回信,内容包括:
1.食物(小麦、大米、蔬菜、少量鱼和肉);
2.优点(平衡饮食,富含纤维,低糖,低脂肪);
3.不足(能量不足)。
注意:1.词数100左右;
2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
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【答案】Dear Dan Friedell,
As two different cultures, there are several differences between Chinese and western diets. Generally, Chinese food is a fairly healthy diet. People mainly eat rice, wheat, etc. Besides, Chinese eat plenty of vegetables, together with a little meat and fish. Chinese diet is rich in fibre, low in sugar and fat. But it sometimes doesn’t provide enough energy.
As you mentioned, your food gives high energy, but it contains too much sugar and fat, which can bring people some troubles like overweight or heart disease.
What about combining the Chinese and western diets together? It must be an interesting attempt.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】本文属于提纲类作文,要求假如你是李华,你的美国笔友Dan Friedell来信向你介绍了西方饮食的特点(高热、高脂、高糖)。同时他想了解中国饮食的特点。请给他写封回信。要注意信件的格式和特殊用词。要点:1.食物(小麦、大米、蔬菜、少量鱼和肉);
2.优点(平衡饮食,富含纤维,低糖,低脂肪);3.不足(能量不足)。考虑用一般现在时来写。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高,要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题,给出的要点都需要包括,缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,一定要契合给出的开头,不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面,结构紧凑,是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语,为文章增色不少,如: plenty of大量,be rich in富有……的。还使用了定语从句As you mentioned, your food gives high energy, but it contains too much sugar and fat, which can bring people some troubles like overweight or heart disease. 等多种句式结构,增加了文章的可读性。