Question

【题目】假设你校英语社团举办以 “节约能源，从我做起” 为主题的征文活动。根据下面所给的要点提示，写一篇英语短文。

要点提示：1. 节约水电等；2. 主动向周围人宣传节约能源的思想。

注意：1. 词数：120左右。开头已为你写好，不计入词数；

2. 内容可适当发挥，注意行文连贯。

These days wasting things has become a common phenomenon around us. __________________________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

These days wasting things has become a common phenomenon around us. As high school students, we can do our part to save energy.

First of all, we should form the habit of saving water, especially when we brush our teeth and wash hands, and never leave water running unnecessarily. Meanwhile, we ought to save electricity. When we leave classrooms or our homes, we should make sure that the lights and other electrical appliances have been turned off. And to launch “Clear Your Plate” campaign is a good measure to avoid the waste of food. We can also recycle plastic, paper and drink cans. Use recyclable products instead of disposal ones. What’s more, we should recommend our relatives and friends as well as our parents to raise the awareness of saving energy.

Let’s start right now and spare no effort to do a little bit every day! A small effort will make a big difference.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于应用文写作，根据提示信息说明来介绍节约用水的理念。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，不可遗漏，明确要点；2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析构思；3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态，本文应该用一般现在时态；4、尽量使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次；5、注意行文的连贯性。

【亮点说明】1、文章脉络结构清晰，整体框架严密。囊括了所有要点，写了如何节约用水、用电，珍惜粮食，还扩充了一点垃圾回收，条理清晰。2、运用较多高级短语，避免文章陷入平庸的分数段，如：form the habit、launch “Clear Your Plate” campaign、raise the awareness、spare no effort使文章更加生动，所以考生要在平时注重积累，争取能把高级词汇或者短语运用到自己的文章中去。3、变换句型，注重时态。如：现在分词作伴随状语never leave water running unnecessarily给读者耳目一新的感受。特别是最后一句话成为全篇的点睛之笔，使文章更有水平。