Question

假如你叫李明，现在给美国的姑姑发一封电子邮件，告诉她近5年来家乡发生的变化。内容如下：

1. 建了许多高楼大厦，还建了许多新工厂、学校、医院以及立交桥（overpass），街道加宽（widen）、硬化(harden)，交通十分方便；

2. 街心建了一个公园，路旁的树木和鲜花使它显得更加美丽；

3. 许多家庭有了私家车，人们的生活变得丰富多彩；

4. 现在通过发电子邮件能更好地与世界各地的朋友保持联系。

注意：词数100个左右。

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Answer 1

Dear aunt,

Our hometown has changed a lot in the past five years. Many tall buildings as well as new factories, school, overpasses and hospitals have been built, which are modern and beautiful. Meanwhile, the streets have been widened and hardened, which makes it very convenient for people to travel.

In the center of the street there is a beautiful park, and the flowers and trees by the roadsides make it more beautiful. Besides, many families have got cars of their own. People’s life here has become rich and colorful. And it is now easier to keep in touch with friends all over the world by e-mail.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Ling Ming

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求给在美国的姑姑写一封邮件，告诉她家乡近五年的变化。写作要点包括：修建了许多高楼大厦、工厂、学校等；街心建了公园；许多家庭有了私家车，生活变得丰富；能更好地与世界各地的朋友保持联系等四个方面；词数在100词左右；注意书信的格式；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观；注意行文的连贯性。

亮点说明：范文涵盖了所给要点，并注意语句的连贯性；范文还使用了定语从句、现在完成时等语法知识，具备较强的语言运用能力。

语法方面：现在完成时Our hometown has changed a lot in the past five years.；定语从句①which are modern and beautiful，②which makes it very convenient for people to travel等，使作文句式多样，使句子衔接紧凑、自然；

篇章结构方面：范文注意使用meanwhile, and, besides等衔接句子和段落，使表达变得很有条理；

短语和搭配方面：范文使用了as well as, have got, of their own, keep in touch with, all over the world, makes it convenient for sb to do等，使作文的内容得到充实。

考点：书信类作文