Question

9．一天，一位好心人为鸟做了一件大好事．请根据图画内容，写一篇100词左右的小故事．记述这位好心人的所作所为．

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分析 本篇书面表达属于图画类作文，根据提示信息天，一位好心人为鸟做了一件大好事．请根据图画内容，写一篇100词左右的小故事．记述这位好心人的所作所为  写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息2、图画是文章的总体框架，要在图图画的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：cut down砍倒； kind-hearted 心地善良的；In fact事实上；In my opinion以我的观点来看；carry away带走
 There was a very tall tree，where some birds lived happily．（高分句型一）
Seeing the homeless birds，he felt sorry，so he made a wooden house for them，thinking he solved their problem，and carried the tree away．（高分句型二）
In my opinion，the best way to protect animals is to leave them as they are．（高分句型三）

解答 There was a very tall tree，where some birds lived happily．（高分句型一）The big tree provided homes for the birds and also benefited man very much．One day，a man wanted to make a beautiful house for himself．He cut down the trees，leaving the birds homeless．But he was a kind-hearted man．Seeing the homeless birds，he felt sorry，so he made a wooden house for them，thinking he solved their problem，and carried the tree away．（高分句型二） In fact，the wooden house would not help the birds because the man destroyed their living environment，too．In my opinion，the best way to protect animals is to leave them as they are．（高分句型三）Never disturb them and never destroy their surroundings!

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．