Question

13．假定你是中学生李华．在一位名叫 Tiger Mom 的学生家长的博客上，你看到如下内容．请你根据博客内容、写作要点和要求，给这位家长回复．
I'm the mother of a fourteen-year-old．I have a rule for my daughter：be among the top 5students or get punished in one way or another．She has been doing very well in school，but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her．Am I wrong？
写作要点：
1．表明自己的看法；
2．陈述至少两点理由；
3．提出至少两条建议．
要求：
1．短文词数不少于 100（不含已写好的部分）；
2．内容充实，结构完整，语意连贯；
3．书写须清晰、工整．
Hi，Tiger Mom，
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China．As far as I'm concerned，it is not quite right for you to do so．My reasons are as follows．
Firstly，too much pressure leads to lack of time to participate in after-classactivities．As a result，your daughter can't get fully developed．Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person．
So I suggest you take your friends'advice．Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities．Besides，you might as well let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do and give her support and encouragementin time．
I hope you will find these suggestions helpful．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 写好这类作文要注意几个步骤：1． 认真审题，找准提示语中的关键词或句，确定中心思想．2． 依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章的脉络3． 准确定位人称、时态．注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．4．最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
高分句型一：
Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person
更重要的是，惩罚决不是帮助她建立自信心的明智选择，这对一个人来说是非常重要和有价值的．
高分句型二：
Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities．
与其给你的女儿太多的压力，让她更多的时间做其他活动更可取．

解答 Hi，Tiger Mom，
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China． As far as I'm concerned，it is not quite right for you to do so．My reasons are as follows．
Firstly，too much pressure leads to lack of time to participate in after-class activities．As a result，your daughter can't get fully developed．Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person（高分句型一）．
So I suggest you take your friends'advice．Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities（高分句型二）．Besides，you might as well let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do and give her support and encouragement in time．
I hope you will find these suggestions helpful．
Li Hua

点评 开放性作文给出一定的写作主题，并此为基础进行思维和联想，自由发挥．不仅考查学生在内容、结构安排、语言运用和组织方面的能力，而且对学生的想像力、发散思维、归纳判断能力也有很高的要求．