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16．你们班准备举办一个主题为"My Favorite Sports Star"的班会，请你根据以下表格信息，写一篇英语短文，简要介绍羽毛球选手林丹，并向全班作演讲．
注意：1．词数120左右；
2．可以适当添加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头与结尾已写好，不计入总词数．

姓名	林丹，绰号"超级丹"
籍贯	中国福建龙岩
出生日期	1983.10.14
身高	1.7m
体重	72kg
职业生涯	5岁开始打羽毛球；12岁参军；18岁进入国家队；获得多项国际大赛冠军，包括北京奥运会和伦敦奥运会两枚金牌
比赛风格	左手握拍，以扣球著称；获胜后常常敬礼或将衣服扔向观众以示庆祝

参考词汇：羽毛球 badminton； 绰号 nickname； 冠军 champion； 敬礼 salute； 扣球 smash
Good afternoon，everyone!
My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，Fujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）His professional career began six years later when he was admitted into the national team．He is 1.78 m tall and weighs 72kg．He is famous for hissmash as well as his left-handed playing style．So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）After winning a game，he often salutes audiences of all sides or throws his sportswear to the crowds to celebrate his victory．
Thank you for listening．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于图表类作文，根据提示信息你们班准备举办一个主题为"My Favorite Sports Star"的班会，请你根据以下表格信息，写一篇英语短文，简要介绍羽毛球选手林丹，并向全班作演讲   写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息  2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在图表的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：at the age of在…岁的时候；be admitted into被录取；is famous for因为…而出名；including包括；a variety of 各种各样；
My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
  Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，Fujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）
So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!
        My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
        Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，Fujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）His professional career began six years later when he was admitted into the national team．He is 1.78 m tall and weighs 72kg．He is famous for his smash as well as his left-handed playing style．So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）After winning a game，he often salutes audiences of all sides or throws his sportswear to the crowds to celebrate his victory．
         Thank you for listening．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．