Question

7．假设你校开展了"争做环保卫士"的活动．只要向学校交废旧电池和报纸等，便可获得"环保卫士"卡片一张．请你据此写一篇120词左右的英语报道，向校英语报社投稿，内容要点包括：
1、简要介绍该活动；
2、发表你对该活动的看法；
3、提出其他有关环保的建议．
参考词汇：环保卫士Guardian to Protect the Environment；电池battery．

Answer 1

分析 作文要求写一篇新闻报道．第一步，首先简单介绍活动内容；第二步，分层次介绍活动的意义和好处；第三步，提出自己的建议．本篇范文内容充实，层次清楚，语言运用得当．长短句穿插使用，错落有致，是一篇不错的新闻报道．
亮点部分
Recently an activity has been going on in our school which is called"Becoming a Guardian to Protect the Environment"．（高分句型）本句带有定语从句
Recycling them is of great importance in terms of conserving natural resources，environment protection and human health．（高分句型） be+of+抽象名词结构
 And we shouldn't leave the tap water running after we use it．（高分句型）running属于现在分词做宾补

解答 Recently an activity has been going on in our school which is called"Becoming a Guardian to Protect the Environment"．（高分句型） Students are asked to hand in used batteries，newspaper and so on to get a card as a reward．I think we can benefit a lot from this activity．
Firstly，this activity will help to raise our environmental awareness and save resources．Secondly，the used batteries are harmful to the environment．Recycling them is of great importance in terms of conserving natural resources，environment protection and human health．（高分句型）
Meanwhile，we can still do a lot more to help protect the environment．For example，we should remember to turn off the light before we leave the room．And we shouldn't leave the tap water running after we use it．（高分句型）

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