Question

2012年10月9日，巴基斯坦十五岁女孩马拉拉在放学回家途中遭到塔利班暗杀，头部中枪。康复后，马拉拉不畏威胁、积极为巴基斯坦女童争取受教育权利。联合国将每年的7月12日（她的生日）定为“马拉拉日”（Malala Day）。作为同龄人的你，请根据以下提示，用英语写一篇短文。你的短文应包括以下内容：

1．简述马拉拉的故事；

2.说明教育的重要性（至少两点）；

3．谈谈学校教育对你的影响（至少两点）。

注意：

1.作文词数巧0左右。开头已经写好，不计入总词数。

2.作文中不得提及有关考生个人身份的任何信息，如校名、人名等。

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Answer 1

On October 9,2012,Malala,a 15-year-old girl, was shot in the head by the Taliban on her way home from school. However, the Taliban failed to silence her. After a miraculous recovery，she was committed to fighting for girls’ right to education. In honor of her bravery and devotion, the UN declared July 12(her birthday) as Malala Day.

Deeply inspired by the story of Malala, I firmly believe in the significance of education. It enables people to raise their voices for rights and change the world by calling for more equality. Furthermore, education promotes the development of science and technology as well as more values and world peace. Without education, people may become weak, fearful and hopeless.

When I reflect on my own experience, I feel grateful I have a lot from my school education. To begin with, I have acquired knowledge and skills to prepare myself for the future. In addition, school education provides me with opportunities to broaden my horizon and better myself. Finally, I have learned to be a more caring and loving human being.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇开放性作文写作,要求有三个：1．简述马拉拉的故事；2.说明教育的重要性（至少两点）；

3．谈谈学校教育对你的影响（至少两点）。但是具体的内容要考生自己发挥。对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。在完成开放性作文时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要赋予变化，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides, further, last but not least等。在发表个人观点的时候，可以使用谚语来提升整个文章的档次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。

【亮点说明】文章使用了很好的短语和句子： fail to 没能做某事， be committed to致力于…， fight for 为…而斗争，In honor of为了纪念…，as well as 不但，而且，reflect on反思， broaden my horizon开阔我的视野，call for要求， Deeply inspired by the story of Malala, I firmly believe in the significance of education.这句话使用了过去分词做状语，还有范文的一大亮点是关联词的使用，如：Furthermore, To begin with, In addition, Finally。

考点：考查开放式作文