Question

10．假设你是舒城中学的学生张华，你给当地的环保局写一份报告，报告你们家乡万佛湖的现状，内容应包括以下要点：
1．万佛湖是舒城的旅游景地，历来水清鱼多；
2．现在由于工农业污染和当地渔民过度捕捞，湖水受污染，鱼类和数量明显减少；
3．你的建议．
To：The Bureau of Environmental Protection
From：Zhanghua
Date：27^th April
Subject：The situation of Wanfo Lake
____________________．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息给当地的环保局写一份报告，报告你们家乡万佛湖的现状，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：万佛湖是舒城的旅游景地，历来水清鱼多；现在由于工农业污染和当地渔民过度捕捞，湖水受污染，鱼类和数量明显减少；你的建议． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：Wanfo Lake，whose water was very clear，used to be a place of interest and there were various fish in it．句中使用了whose引导发非限制性定语从句；Therefore，the fish in it are becoming fewer and fewer because of the chemical waste and overfishing by the fishermen．句中的therefore，因此，属于过渡词，because of 属于介词短语；In conclusion总之．

解答 To：The Bureau of Environmental Protection
From：Zhanghua
Date：27^th April
Subject：The situation of Wanfo Lake
     Wanfo Lake，whose water was very clear，used to be a place of interest and there were various fish in it．（高分句型一）But now the water has been polluted and most of the pollution comes from industrial and agricultural waste．Therefore the fish in it are becoming fewer and fewer because of the chemical waste and overfishing by the fishermen．（高分句型二）
    In conclusion，a certain department needs to do something to handle the problem，or the fish in it will altogether disappear．It should prevent the pollution and educate the fishermen to strengthen the awareness of environment protection．（高分句型三）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．