Question

【题目】书面表达

你校正在进行“英语读书周”活动。该活动要求学生摘录名言佳句(quote)并相互交流。以下是某同学摘录的句子：“Your future depends on many things, but mostly on you”。请按下列要求用英语写一篇100－120个词的短文：

1. 针对摘录句中的观点谈谈你的看法；

2. 举例说明理由。注意：短文的开头已给出(不计词数)。

In the English Reading Week, one of my classmates recommended a quote to us, which goes like this：“Your future depends on many things, but mostly on you.”

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Answer 1

【答案】

In the English Reading Week, one of my classmates recommended a quote to us, which goes like this：“Your future depends on many things, but mostly on you.” I can't agree more with this view. It's true that our future is determined by many things, such as opportunities and help from others, but our own attitude, determination, and hard work play a more important role. In other words, we are the master of our own future.

Take Abraham Lincoln for example. He was born in a poor family, and only received a limited education in his childhood. Yet through his painstaking efforts, he changed not only his own fate but also the history of America. Even to this day, Lincoln is regarded as one of the most inspiring figures in the world. Therefore, I firmly believe that our future is in our own hands.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于观点类议论文——开放式。试题材料新颖，贴近考生实际生活，属于半开放性话题。对既定的话题进行讨论，考生有一定的自由发挥空间，畅所欲言，各抒己见。论点明确，论据充分是得分的关键。如能灵活运用学过而且熟练的亮点词汇、短语和句型，尽量变换句式，长短句交错使用，并且恰当地穿插一些过渡性词语，使文章自然、流畅，有较强的逻辑性，文章一定会脱颖而出。在写作时注意把握好以下几点：(1)书写规范，卷面整洁。(2)行文紧凑，过渡自然。(3)要点完整，表达清楚。(4)语法正确，时态准确。(5)用词无误，控制得当(100-120词之间)。(6)认真复查，胸有成竹。

【亮点说明】

本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如It's true that our future is determined by many things, such as opportunities and help from others, but our own attitude, determination, and hard work play a more important role.使用了主语从句和并列句。此外，文章还使用了大量短语In other words，not only … but also。Yet，therefore等词的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。