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【题目】校广播站正在进行校文明学生的人物介绍。请你写一篇介绍你班 (高一3班)江明(男)同学的广播稿。字数100左右。内容包括1. 良好的性格和行为表现 2. 一件具体事例 3. 对自己的要求和愿望。
Hello, everyone! Today I am to introduce another Civilized Student, whose name is Jiang Ming, from Class Three.
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【答案】Hello, everyone! Today I am to introduce another Civilized Student, whose name is Jiang Ming, from Class Three. What impresses us is that he always wears a merry smile whenever greeting teachers or classmates. In addition, it is his politeness and great help to others that make him get along well with every classmate. He is always ready to offer help to those who have problems with schoolwork or daily life. Moreover, his optimism and hard work also inspire his classmates.
Last month, I felt terribly depressed due to my bad grades in the monthly examination. He helped me analyze my weaknesses and strengths in all subjects and recommended some useful reference books to me. His encouragement cheered me up and built up my confidence again.
Words fail to describe how helpful and kind he is! He has his own ambition that he wants to be a doctor one day so that he can help more patients in need.
【解析】本文章通过具体事例,采用了多种句式塑造了一个思想品质好,爱助人的个性鲜明,有血有肉的学生形象-江明。本篇文章重点突出,结构完整,语言流畅,条理清晰。
亮点:
(1)在文章中使用了很多复杂句。可见驾驭英语的能力非常强。
复杂句1如:What impresses us is that he always wears a merry smile whenever greeting teachers or classmates。
这个复杂句中既有what引导的主语从句,又有一个由that引导的表语从句,在表语从句中又有一个由whenever状语从句非谓语。
What impresses us is that... 是what引导的主语从句 ;由that引导的表语从句是:….is that he always wears a merry smile whenever greeting teachers or classmates;whenever引导的状语从句是he always wears a merry smile whenever greeting teachers or classmates。
复杂句2:He has his own ambition that he wants to be a doctor one day so that he can help more patients in need.其中有一个同位语从句e has his own ambition that he…和一个结果状语从从句…so that he can help more patients in need。
(2)很好地使用了强调句型。it is his politeness and great help to others that make him get along well with every classmate.
(3)使用了几处并列句和复合句。
定语从句1:I am to introduce another Civilized Student, whose name is Jiang Ming, from Class Three.
定语从句2:He is always ready to offer help to those who have problems with schoolwork or daily life
(4)感叹句。
Words fail to describe how helpful and kind he is!
(5)非谓语作状语。如:he always wears a merry smile whenever greeting teachers or classmates
(6)使用了许多连接词和许多高级词汇。如:In addition, Moreover,get along well with terribly depressed,analyze my weaknesses and strengths等。。使的文章逻辑清晰,结构完整,如流水一般,一气呵成。
总之这是一篇不可多得的上上乘作品,很值得同学们借鉴学习!