Question

4．假定你是李华，你与本班英国交换生Tom约好本周末一起进行语文训练，但因故无法进行．请你给他发一封电子邮件作出解释．
注意：
（1）词数100左右；（开头和结尾已给出，不计人总词数）；
（2）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
Dear Tom，
I'm sorry to inform you that the practice this weekend has to be cancelled for an emergency in my family．
This morning I received a message from my parents that my beloved grandpa had passed away．I have to leave everything at hand for his funeral and see him off for the last time，After all，I was the only child he had cherished best among all his descendants．
How I wish you understood my sadness for the loss of him and the dilemma between my feeling for him and the promise for you!But there are no other choices for me at the moment．
Time permitting，I'm bound to make up for the practice next weekend．
Wish you a happy weekend．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇开放式作文，写作时不仅仅对要点进行生硬的翻译，而是要添加些内容，使文章看起来更充实，要组成一篇通顺连贯的短文．需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合给出的开头，不能出现文章脱节问题．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．
（高分句型一）This morning I received a message from my parents that my beloved grandpa had passed away．
该句型使用了that引导的同位语从句，指message的内容；
（高分句型二）Time permitting，I'm bound to make up for the practice next weekend．
Time permitting该句型使用了现在分词做状语，为独立主格结构，意思是时间容许的话；
高级词汇：cancel取消；pass away去世；cherish珍惜；dilemma困境；be bound to注定；make up for弥补；

解答 Dear Tom，
     （开头通知Tom取消训练）I'm sorry to inform you that the practice this weekend has to be cancelled for an emergency in my family．
     （高分句型一）This morning I received a message from my parents that my beloved grandpa had passed away．I have to leave everything at hand for his funeral and see him off for the last time，After all，I was the only child he had cherished best among all his descendants．
     How I wish you understood my sadness for the loss of him and the dilemma between my feeling for him and the promise for you!But there are no other choices for me at the moment．
   （高分句型二）Time permitting，I'm bound to make up for the practice next weekend．
   Wish you a happy weekend．
      
Yours，
Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．