Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你的好朋友Susan前不久随父母去了美国，她写信告诉你她很不适应美国的校园生活，感到很孤独。请你根据以下要点用英语给她写一封电子邮件。

1.学好英语，从而增加和别人交流的机会；

2.多交一些朋友，友情会使她忘记孤独；

3.积极参加各种活动，使自己的生活更加有趣。

注意：1.词数：100词左右；2.可适当增加细节。（适应：adapt to)

Dear Susan,

I’m sorry to hear that you are having trouble

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Susan,

I’m sorry to hear that you are having trouble adapting to your new school life in America, but this situation can be easily changed if you take my suggestions. Now my suggestions are as follows:

Firstly, you should work hard at English, which can give you more opportunities to communicate with others. Secondly, why not make some friends? They can help you to know more about America, and friendship can help you to forget your loneliness. Thirdly, it would be a good idea if you take an active part in all kinds of activities, which will help to make life more interesting. I believe by doing this, you will be happier with your new life soon.

I hope these suggestions can be very useful to you.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本文属于提纲类作文，要求用英语写一封电子邮件。要注意电子邮件的格式和特殊用词。考虑用一般现在时来写。要点：1.学好英语，从而增加和别人交流的机会；2.多交一些朋友，友情会使她忘记孤独；3.积极参加各种活动，使自己的生活更加有趣。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合给出的开头，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: take one’s suggestions采纳某人的建议，take an active part in积极参加。还使用了定语从句Firstly, you should work hard at English, which can give you more opportunities to communicate with others.和定语从句Thirdly, it would be a good idea if you take an active part in all kinds of activities, which will help to make life more interesting.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。