Question

8．上周六下午四点左右，学生会搞了一次环保活动.30名学生到团城山公园拾垃圾．请根据下列提示写一篇小组长工作总结演讲．
内容包括：目的 提高公众的环保意识
效果1．吸引了一些人的参与和支持．
2．因为时间太晚．参与的人不多．
3．有些人甚至不知道我们在干什么．
建议…
注意：1．词数120左右，2．行文应连贯．内容应完整，3．开头语与落款已为你写好．
My fellow students，As head of the group，I would like to report to you on the event．
                                                         
…Thank you．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息上周六下午四点左右，学生会搞了一次环保活动.30名学生到团城山公园拾垃圾．请根据下列提示写一篇小组长工作总结演讲，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：目的 提高公众的环保意识；  效果（1）．吸引了一些人的参与和支持．（2）．因为时间太晚．参与的人不多．（3）．有些人甚至不知道我们在干什么． 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般过去在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：for the purpose of 为了…的目的；pick up捡起；Actually事实上；For one thing一方面；For another另一方面；Otherwise，否则；put up 张贴；
Last Friday，the Students'Union organized a cleanup project in Zhongshan park，for the purpose of raising the environmental awareness of the public．（高分句型一）
When we were collecting the litter，many people came to our help，showing considerable appreciation and support．（高分句型二）
And also，we can put up some posters to tell people what we are doing and call their attention to environmental protection．（高分句型三）

解答 My fellow students，
     As head of the group，I would like to report to you on the event．
     Last Friday，the Students'Union organized a cleanup project in Zhongshan park，for the purpose of raising the environmental awareness of the public．（高分句型一）At around 4 p．m．，35 students went to the park to pick up the litter．（活动目的）
     Actually，we did a wonderful job．When we were collecting the litter，many people came to our help，showing considerable appreciation and support．（高分句型二）But our work still left something to be desired．For one thing，since we started late in the afternoon，it was not long enough to attract enough people．For another，some people passed by because they even didn't know what we were doing．Otherwise，our project could have been much better and more effective．（活动效果）
     Next time if we have similar activities，I think we should try to start earlier．And also，we can put up some posters to tell people what we are doing and call their attention to environmental protection．（高分句型三）（个人建议）
     Thank you．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．