题目内容
【题目】音乐在我们生活中起着重要的作用,生活中不能缺少音乐。音乐可以帮助我们调节情绪,紧张的时候可以使我们轻松,忧伤的时候可以使我们快乐。请根据提示写一篇100词左右的短文,谈谈音乐的重要性,可适当发挥。
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【答案】Music is playing an important part in our life. Most of us are fond of music and listen to music regularly. I attach great importance to music. To start with,when I feel sad,music can comfort me,then I can feel more confident about life and my problems. Also,when I have too much press with my school work,music can make me feel relaxed. In addition,when I have some difficulty with sleep,some soft music can help me fall asleep easily. Finally,when I am in a state of worry,music can calm me down and make me feel optimistic. All in all,music is so important that life is a journey through a desert if there is no music in our life.
【解析】这是一篇议论文。文章内容提示已经给出。同学们在写这篇文章时,要注意以下几点:1. 通篇以一般现在时态为主。2. 要点要齐全。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词,使上下文行文流畅,衔接自然流程。3.
行文思路要有逻辑性,在中心论点给出后要由浅入深,做到力求全面。该文写作的难点主要是如何更好的叙述这三点。因为所有考生的大致内容都是一样的所以主要是看能不能写出让考官眼前一亮 的作文。同时要使文章的内容充实,不能显得无力。学生可以采用简单句和复杂句结合的方法,并且同时穿插一些祈使句和倒装句使文章充实。
【范文亮点】
文章开篇给出了全文的中心论点Music is playing an important part in our life.言简意赅,主旨鲜明。先从一般人写起,再写到自己,音乐给自己带来了什么,对自己有什么帮助都详细贴切的写了出来从而更呼应了文章的主旨句。最后用All in all总结首尾呼应,文章结构紧凑。文中还用了are fond of,attach great importance to,in a state of等高级短语让文章看起来更有料,To start with等连接词使行文非常流畅。特别是文章结尾最后一句内容让阅卷老师眼前一亮。