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3．假设你是李华，你上周刚刚参加了你校举办的第十届英语演讲比赛，并从三十名选手中脱颖而出，荣获"十佳奖"．在准备参赛期间，你的外教Mr．Craige对你提供了很多指导和帮助．现请你用英语给他写一封感谢信，内容包括：
1．获奖情况及感受；
2．回顾准备过程；
3．感谢他的帮助；
4．邀他来家做客．
注意：1．词数120左右；2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
提示：十佳奖：Top Ten Prize  选手：competitor
Dear Mr．Craige，I'm willing to tell you something about the 10th English Speaking Contest I took part in last week in our school．
I got the"Top Ten Prize"out of 30 competitors，which was totally beyond my imagination．（高分句型一）When I heard the final result，I couldn't believe my ears and jumped with joy．
It's because of your effort that I have made such rapid progress in my spoken English．（高分句型二）Before the contest，whenever you had free time，you would help me practice my spoken English．Besides，you communicated with me as much as possible，and corrected my pronunciation，intonation as well．What's more，you taught me some helpful speaking skills and made me full of confidence．Without your help，I wouldn't have achieved such a good result．（高分句型三）Also，I have benefited a lot from this competition．All in all，I really appreciate your help．
Thank you again for your advice and kind help．I sincerely invite you to my home for dinner and have a good time．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你是李华，你上周刚刚参加了你校举办的第十届英语演讲比赛，并从三十名选手中脱颖而出，荣获"十佳奖"．在准备参赛期间，你的外教Mr．Craige对你提供了很多指导和帮助．现请你用英语给他写一封感谢信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：获奖情况及感受；．回顾准备过程；感谢他的帮助；邀他来家做客．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：beyond one's imagination 超乎想象make rapid progress 取得快速进步achieve a good result 取得一个好成绩benefit from…从…中受益all in all 总而言之have a good time 玩得开心
 I got the"Top Ten Prize"out of 30 competitors，which was totally beyond my imagination．（高分句型一）
It's because of your effort that I have made such rapid progress in my spoken English．（高分句型二）
Without your help，I wouldn't have achieved such a good result．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Craige，
      I'm willing to tell you something about the 10th English Speaking Contest I took part in last week in our school．
      I got the"Top Ten Prize"out of 30 competitors，which was totally beyond my imagination．（高分句型一）When I heard the final result，I couldn't believe my ears and jumped with joy．
      It's because of your effort that I have made such rapid progress in my spoken English．（高分句型二）Before the contest，whenever you had free time，you would help me practice my spoken English．Besides，you communicated with me as much as possible，and corrected my pronunciation，intonation as well．What's more，you taught me some helpful speaking skills and made me full of confidence．Without your help，I wouldn't have achieved such a good result．（高分句型三）Also，I have benefited a lot from this competition．All in all，I really appreciate your help．
      Thank you again for your advice and kind help．I sincerely invite you to my home for dinner and have a good time．
                                                                                                                                                                                                       Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．