题目内容
【题目】在学校组织的“感动校园人物”评选活动中,你班经过讨论,决定推荐李华参加评选。请按以下要求写一篇80-100字左右的文章。内容包括:
1.推荐李华的理由;
2.例举1-2个事例。
注意:文章开头已经给出,不计入总词数。
After a heated discussion, our class has decided to recommend (推荐) Li Hua as the Touching Figure On Campus.
【答案】
After a heated discussion, our class has decided to recommend Li Hua as the Touching Figure On Campus.
We have every reason to believe he is qualified for the honor. First, Li Hua is always willing to offer us help whenever necessary. Besides, his great devotion to work as monitor makes our class a best place to study in. However, what has impressed us most is his unconditional love to poor children. Last summer vacation, he volunteered to teach English in a small village, which has inspired many other students to join in and thus helped open up a new world to those children as well.
All in all, his selfless love touches our heart and his action suggests that even small efforts can make a difference to those in need. Therefore, we strongly support Li Hua as the Touching Figure On Campus.
【解析】
试题分析:这是一篇提纲式作文,要求写一篇文章推荐李华参加评选“感动校园人物”。要注意以下几点:1、首先要认真审题,认清写作要求和提纲之间的关系,然后确定文章的主题、文体、人称和时态。2、要根据所给提纲,列出要点,并以此为基础充分发挥自己的想象力,灵活运用英语知识,采用不同的表达方式将各要点完整地表述出来。3、同时应选用合适的连接词或过渡词,使文章具有一定的连贯性,注意认真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标点误用等。
【亮点说明】文章主次分明,详略得当,语言十分准确、简洁,并且根据情景的发展,按顺序安排了材料。运用了多种不同的词汇表达方式,如We have every reason to believe he is qualified for the honour.这句话用了词组have every reason to do sth“有理由做…” 和be qualified for“合格” ,his selfless love touches our heart and his action suggests that even small efforts can make a difference to those in need. 这句话用了词组:make a difference to“对…产生影响。且句式多变,如 Li Hua is always willing to offer us help whenever necessary.这句话用了省略句, his great devotion to work as monitor makes our class a best place to study in. 这句话用了不定式做定语,what has impressed us most is his unconditional love to poor children.这句话用了主语从句和表语从句,he volunteered to teach English in a small village, which has inspired many other students to join in and thus helped open up a new world to those children as well.这句话用了非限制性定语从句,同时文章还使用了First, Besides, However, Therefore,这样的关联词,使文章更加连贯。