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4．假定你是李华，是校报小记者．请你为校报写一篇英语短文，介绍最近在我国很多城市发生的雾霾天气．请参考以下要点：
（1）危害：阻碍交通，危害健康
（2）原因：空气污染
（3）如何自我防护：雾霾天气早晚少开窗户；多吃水果补充维生素
注意：
（1）词数120左右；
（2）适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：雾霾haze          维生素vitamin
Recently haze pollution has happened in many cities of China．It's one of the most dangerous weather conditions．Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze．What's worse，it also affects our health．if breathing in haze，people may feel uncomfortable and get ill．（高分句型一）
The reason for haze is air pollution．It results from waste gases released from cars，factories or construction sties．In view of the above，we need to protect ourselves from haze pollution．First of all，in case of haze pollution，we shouldn't open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset．（高分句型二）Besides，we'd better wear masks when we go outside．What's more，we should eat more fruit，from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to disease．（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 题目假设了你的身份，即校报小记者李华，需要为校报写一篇英语短文，介绍最近在我国很多城市发生的雾霾（haze）天气．同时参考以下三个要点作文：危害（阻碍交通，危害健康）、原因（空气污染）、自我防护措施（雾霾天气早晚少开窗、多吃水果补充维生素等）．不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性．
亮点说明：
范文中对于"原因"这一词的表达用了多种形式的表达，"Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze"，"it also affects our health．"，"The reason for haze is air pollution"，"It results from waste gases"，多种形式表达同一种意思，避免重复，可以使文章变化多样，避免单调乏味；
范文中使用了较多的语法知识，动词过去分词短语做定语 low visibility caused by haze，省略句If breathing in haze，祈使句we shouldn't open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset，时间状语从句when we go outside，非限定性定语从句we should eat more fruit，from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to diseases，固定句型结构sth has occured、sb had better do sth 等．动词过去分词短语做定语、省略句、祈使句、时间状语从句、非限定性定语从句、固定句型结构等语法的使用提升了文章的档次，同时也显示较高的语法知识点使用能力；
范文中注意使用了what's worse，also，in view of the above，first of all，besides，what's more，等做连词，增加了文章的连贯性，使文章上下联系紧密；
范文中使用了一些固定短语：protect sb from，in case of，take exercise，before the sun rises a，after sunset；build up等，丰富了文章的内容，使文章更加充实完整．

解答 Recently haze pollution has happened in many cities of China．It's one of the most dangerous weather conditions．Many accidents have occurred due to low visibility caused by haze．What's worse，it also affects our health．if breathing in haze，people may feel uncomfortable and get ill．（高分句型一）
     The reason for haze is air pollution．It results from waste gases released from cars，factories or construction sties．In view of the above，we need to protect ourselves from haze pollution．First of all，in case of haze pollution，we shouldn't open the windows or take exercise before the sun rises and after sunset．（高分句型二）Besides，we'd better wear masks when we go outside．What's more，we should eat more fruit，from which we can get enough vitamins to build up the resistance to disease．（高分句型三）

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．