Question

【题目】假如你是高二学生李华，下面这幅图是你在网上看到的图片。图片内容是两位志愿者维护交通秩序的画面。你有所感触，打算针对此事给《二十一世纪英文报》编辑投稿。

要点如下：

1. 描述图片内容；

2. 你的感想。

注意：1. 同数：100左右，开头和结尾已为你写好，不计人总词数;

2. 适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

3. 参考同汇：交通礼仪traffic etiquette。

Dear Editor,

This is a picture of a busy road.

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Editor,

This is a picture of a busy road. The cyclists and the vehicles are waiting for the traffic lights to turn green. From the picture we can see each of the two women volunteers is holding a red flag to make a stop sign.

At some crossings of busy streets and roads in a city or a big town, we often see volunteers helping keep traffic order and maintain traffic safety. In addition, they also promote traffic etiquette. Due to their devotion, people’s awareness of traffic safety and obeying traffic laws can be improved. Their good deeds should be sung high praise for.

From my point of view, as civilized citizens we should obey traffic rules consciously and become polite drivers or cyclists. Thus we can help improve traffic conditions and reduce traffic accidents to some degree.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】本文属于图画作文。图画作文的写作要领：1、根据提示，准确审题。要注意文体，人物和时态。2、认真读图，把握情境，进行图文转换。这是关键。要根据图画中的人物及背景，确定人物之间，人物与背景之间的关系。从整体上把握所呈现的主要内容，围绕特定的主题合理想象。然后将图画所传达的信息以文字的形式呈现出来，并对转换后的内容重新组合，确定主要内容。 3、发表感想。围绕主题展开合理的想象，发表自己的联想或感想。4、确定段落，拟好提纲，斟酌词句，组句成文。

亮点分析：本文结构完整，内容齐全。所用句子多为单句，结构简单。在文中运用了大量的现在进行时，使描述更加生动。文中主动语态和被动语态交互使用，使文章生动活泼。同时还运用了宾语从句：From the picture we can see each of the two women volunteers is holding a red flag to make a stop sign和非谓语做主语：obeying traffic laws can be improved。在文章中大量使用短语，如keep traffic order and maintain traffic safety， promote traffic etiquette，due to their devotion，sing high praise for，improve traffic conditions and reduce traffic accidents， to some degree等增加了文章的可读性。而连词的使用，如In addition, thus让文章语句连贯，有条理。