Question

假如你是李华，现在上高一，你的叔叔现在在美国工作，你觉得父母管得太严，自己解决不了这个问题，于是发邮件给叔叔，希望他跟你父母谈谈，劝说他们改变教育方式，要点如下：

1.学习上要求太高，自己达不到他们的期望值，并经常拿自己和邻居家孩子比，让自己很沮丧；

2.不准看电视、上网；

3.不准自己和女生交朋友；

4.觉得跟父母有代沟(generation gap)，不能很好地沟通。

注意：

1.可以适当增减细节，以使行文连贯；

2.字数120左右；

3.开头和结尾已经写好，不计入总词数.

Dear Uncle,

_________________________________________________________________________

_________________________________________________________________________

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Best wishes,

Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Uncle,

How are you these days? I’m writing to tell you my trouble with my parents.

In my opinion, my parents are too strict with me. They expect too much of me but I really can’t live up to their expectations. Besides, they often compare me with my neighbor who is considered better, which makes me rather depressed. And they even don’t allow me to watch TV or surf the Internet because they think it’s a waste of time. What’s more, I can’t make friends with girls because it may influence my study. In one word, I feel that there is a wide generation gap between us, and therefore we can’t communicate with each other freely.

Till now I haven’t found a good solution to these problems. I would be grateful if you could do me a favor to talk to my parents and persuade them to change the way of education. I’m looking forward to your reply.

Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求给在美国的叔叔写邮件，请叔叔劝父母改变教育方式。写作要点包括：学习上要求过高；不准看电视、上网；不准与异性交朋友；不能跟父母很好地沟通等方面，词数在120词左右，开头饥饿结尾不计入总词数；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观；注意行文的连贯性。

亮点说明：

范文使用了定语从句①who is considered better，②which makes me rather depressed；原因状语从句①because they think it’s a waste of time，②because it may influence my study；宾语从句think it’s a waste of time；表语从句that there is a wide generation gap between us；条件句if you could do me a favor等语法知识，使作文句式多样，在表达上更加具有生动性；

范文注意使用In my opinion, but, Besides, And, What’s more, In one word, and therefore, Till now等词衔接句子和段落，使作文语意连贯、连接紧密；

范文使用了较多的短语和搭配：be strict with, live up to, compare sb with, allow sb to do, make friends with, communicate with, a solution to..., talk to, persuade sb to do, the way of, look forward to...等，使作文内容更加充实，有说服力。

考点：书信类作文