Question

【题目】请以“One person I’m grateful to”为题，用英语写一篇100—120个词的短文，记述一个你认为值得感谢的人。要求如下：

1. 内容必须结合生活中的一个事例;

2. 简要说明值得感谢的原因或从中得到的启示；

3. 文中不得透漏个人信息。

注意：文章的标题已给出（不计词数）。

One Person I’m Grateful to

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Answer 1

【答案】

We are supposed to be grateful to people who are always there with us because they are the charming gardeners who make our souls blossom.

My English teacher is such a great soul, to whom I owe many thanks. During the previous study, my biggest flaw must come to carelessness, which worried me a lot. To make matters worse, I was too anxious to seek the fundamental reason for my failure. I just dedicated myself to huge amounts of practice, regardless of repeated mistakes. Fortunately, my teacher noticed it and offered to have a long talk with me. Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessness and gained confidence as well.

I am grateful to my English teacher for all the support he has given me, which has made me stronger and a better person.

【解析】

试题分析：考查开放性的作文。在完成开放性作文时，首先要选择自己熟悉的短语或者句型，使用词遣句在你的能力范围之内，选择句式时要形式多变，因为这样你才可以更好的驾驭。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides, further, last but not least等。在发表个人观点的时候，可以使用谚语来提升整个文章的档次和文采，也能增加得高分的可能性。本篇习作的话题是“One person I’m grateful to”。这个人可以是现实中的人也可以是文学作品中某个人物。考生可以叙述身边人物的具体事例来说明自己感激的人的具体品质。在范文中，作者选择了自己的英语老师为例，写了老师对自己的帮助以及自己感激的原因。

【亮点说明】本文最大的亮点在于高级词汇的使用，如be supposed to do sth应该做某事； dedicate oneself to….专心于…；regardless of不管，不顾…；gain confidence赢得自信；高级句式的使用也较为频繁，如which worried me a lot.中的which引导的是非限制性定语从句。以及Having been persuaded to change my attitude, I finally got the right way to rid myself of carelessness and gained confidence as well.中的非谓语动词having been persuaded…用法。