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7．假定你是李华，美籍教师苏珊来你班任教一个多月了，她希望同学们对她的教学提出意见和建议．请你根据以下要点提示，用英语给她写一封建议信．
1．讲课语速再慢点；
2．将西方文化与教学相结合；
3．组织课外活动；
4．其他建议．
注意：1．词数100左右；
2．开头和结尾已给出，但不计入总词数；
3．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Susan，
My classmates really appreciate your excellent teaching，but
                                               

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息美籍教师苏珊来你班任教一个多月了，她希望同学们对她的教学提出意见和建议．请你根据以下要点提示，用英语给她写一封建议信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：讲课语速再慢点；将西方文化与教学相结合；组织课外活动；其他建议．
 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：（高分句型一）To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．
该句使用来when引导的时间状语从句；because引导的原因状语从句；还有find it adj．to do觉得做某事…
（高分句型二）we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
该句使用which引导非限制性定语，在which之前加介词by，意思通过活动我们能提高口语；
高级词汇：keep up with  跟的上； have a better understanding of 对…有更好的理解；combine with和…结合；
过渡词：To begin with首先；Secondly其次；Furthermore而且；Finally最后；

解答 Dear  Susan，
     （首先表达感激之情）My classmates really appreciate your excellent teaching，but we think that you can make some improvement in some aspects．（给出适当建议）I am writing to offer you some advice．（高分句型一）To begin with，I hope you can slow down a little bit when giving us a lecture because some students find it hard to keep up with you．Secondly，we will have a better understanding of the text if you can combine the learning material with some western culture．Furthermore，we expect to see some classic movies in the language lab after class in order to broaden our horizons．Finally，（高分句型二）we hope you can organize the English Corner regularly to help us speak English，by which we can improve our spoken English quickly．
    I trust you will consider my suggestions．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．