题目内容
【题目】假如你是李华。来自澳大利亚的交换生Kenton首次离家来中国读书,因生活上和语言交流上有困难,他萌生了回家的念头。不知如何是好的他在某网站上发帖求助,请你据此给他回帖。
注意:1.词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;
3. 开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。
Dear Kenton,
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I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【答案】Dear Kenton,
I am sorry to hear you have difficulty with life and communication abroad, but I am willing to help you out of the trouble.
To tell you the truth, it is natural that you are missing your parents and want to go home. But personally, I don’t think we can live with our parents all the life. Thus, it is a good chance for you to be more independent. You can call your parents more often instead of giving up your study.
If you don’t mind, I would like to be your friend. We can chat online frequently, which will improve your Chinese a lot. Only by communicating with others can you overcome your difficulties.
I am looking forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】首先审题,这篇文章要求假如你是李华。来自澳大利亚的交换生Kenton首次离家来中国读书,因生活上和语言交流上有困难,他萌生了回家的念头。不知如何是好的他在某网站上发帖求助,请你据此给他回帖。其次选用正确的人称和时态,用一般现在时、第二人称来写。然后写出单个句子,使用正确的连词,连句成段。具体来说,写这篇文章时,要注意:大体分三个段落来写,第一自然段说明自己愿意帮助他解决问题;第二自然段提出具体的解决方案并表示自己愿意和他交朋友;第三自然段期待他的答复。文中给出的细节都要包括,不要遗漏。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高,要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题,给出的要点都需要包括,缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。
【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面,结构紧凑,是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语,为文章增色不少,如: be willing to愿意,To tell you the truth说实话。还使用了宾语从句I am sorry to hear you have difficulty with life and communication abroad, but I am willing to help you out of the trouble.和主语从句To tell you the truth, it is natural that you are missing your parents and want to go home.提升了文章的整体水平。