Question

假如你是中学生华华。你在一个叫“家长一百”的家长论坛上看到如下内容。请你写一篇英语文章回复这位家长。

    I'm the mother of a Senior 3 student. I want to send my child to study abroad. I believe that studying abroad will help him to better learn a foreign language, be independent and have a good future. But he is very upset and wants to study at home. We quarrel about this every day. Am I wrong?

写作要点：1.表明自己的看法；

2.举例说明以陈述自己的理由；

3.提出至少两条建议。

注意：1. 词数不少于120词；

2. 文中不得出现自己所在学校的名称和班级同学的姓名。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

Hello,

    I am a Senior 3 student. For your trouble, I take the view that parents should not force us to do things. Here, I want to share a true story with you. One of my elder brother’s classmates was forced to study abroad to live up to his parents’ expectation. But in his inner heart, he just wanted to realize his dream together with his best friend in Beijing University. So he just felt left out in the foreign country and always out of place in that quite new environment. And at last his parents were cast down at what he obtained, not as well as his classmates at home.

    Actually, your son can be good at a foreign language when studying at home, because it all depends on the effort he puts into it. Independence does not only mean living alone, but it also refers to the ability to think about problems and solve them by himself. As long as he values his independence, whether he studies abroad or not, he can be independent. Only when your son is happy about his studies can he study efficiently. Then, he will have a good future ahead of him.

So I suggest that you respect your son’s choice and that you not make him give up his dreams. Just remember: When children do what they are interested in, they will put more time and effort into it.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇开放式作文，就家长与孩子对是否出国留学的不同态度给家长写一封回信。写作时不仅要注意：①开头要点明写信所要谈的话题；②举例并比较详细的叙述；③陈述自己对问题看法；④提出至少两条建议。而且还要注意写作时要准确地运用时态：举例用一般过去时态；陈述自己对问题看法以及提出建议时要用一般现在时和一般将来时。

【亮点说明】范文运用了典型的三段式：话题与举例为第一段；第二段陈述自己对问题看法；第三段则提出了自己的意见。所以范文脉络清楚，结构紧凑；非谓语动词(force us to do things ,want to share a true story with you, to study abroad to live up to his parents’ expectation, felt left out, mean living alone)、被动语态(was forced, were cast down)、复合句(同位语从句I take the view that parents should not force us to do things；定语从句because it all depends on the effort he puts into it；状语从句As long as he values his independence；宾语从句So I suggest that you respect your son’s choice and that you not make him give up his dreams.)、倒装句(Only when your son is happy about his studies can he study efficiently.)、省略句(when studying at home)的运用使范文亮点纷呈；高级词汇的运用更是锦上添花：live up to，inner heart，cast down，refers to ,put more time and effort into it等等。范文恰到好处地运用了连接词(But，So ，And，Actually, not only … but，So )使文章连贯紧密，读起来朗朗上口。

考点：开放式作文