Question

假如你是中学生李华，你的美国朋友Jack在上次给你的电子邮件中抱怨自己最近眼睛近视了。请你给他用英语回一封电子邮件，内容如下：

1．介绍一下你们班同学近视的情况； 

2．分析一下造成你们班这种情况的原因；

3．帮Jack出点儿保持眼睛健康的主意。

注：1．字数110左右；邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好。

2．近视：shortsighted  adj.  shortsightedness n.

Dear Jack，

                                                                                   

                                                                                   

Yours sincerely        

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Jack，

I am sorry to hear that you are suffering from shortsightedness too.

To be frank，almost eight students out of ten in my class have to wear glasses to live a normal school life, including me myself. Many factors contribute to this phenomenon. First，we Chinese students live under a great burden of examinations. We have to fight our way in life with millions of peers. Second, most of us with shortsightedness don’t have a good habit of using our eyes，either due to lack of knowledge or carelessness.

In this case, I strongly recommend that you should not use your computer for that long a time any more and that you should change your habit of reading in bed. Hopefully，your shortsightedness could be corrected by wearing proper glasses.

All in all, don’t worry! It’s no big deal!

Yours sincerely

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：考查应用文中的书信的写作。同时也属于提纲类作文，话题是眼睛近视的问题，要点都已经给出，有分析现状和原因，给出建议，审题时注意本文使用一般现在时，适当的增加细节，使文章更充实，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出。难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用省略句，倒装句和强调句型准确表述。范文中的划线的词或短语都是亮点。

考点：考查提纲类短文写作。

点评：提纲类短文的关键在于要点要全面包括，不能有遗漏和省略。同时注意谋篇布局的顺序，运用合适的连接词连接全文，同时选择高级的词汇和语法项目让文章更有文采。