题目内容
13.电视台播出"中国达人秀"(China's Got Talent)节目后,曾一度受到热议,请以一名观众的身份给节目组写一封信,介绍一个你心目中的达人,可以是电视节目里的选手,也可以是其他人(不要使用真实姓名).文章必须包括:
?你心目中的达人是一个什么样的人
?简单阐述你认为他或她是达人的理由.
分析 写好这类作文要注意几个步骤:1. 认真审题,找准提示语中的关键词或句,确定中心思想.2. 依据关键句,草拟提纲,梳理文章的脉络3. 准确定位人称、时态.注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次.4.最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况,有无拼写错误及标点误用等
高分句型一:
But my talent is around me,who gives me more love than others.She is my mother,the talent in my heart.
但我的达人就在我身边,给予我比别人更多的爱.她是我的母亲,我心里的达人.
高分句型二:
She cares much about students study and life,and she tries her best to help students in need.
她很关心学生的学习生活,并尽她最大的努力帮助有需要的学生.
解答 Dear host
When people say the word"talent",what will you think?Do you have a talent in your heart?Maybe your talent is a famous singer,a movie star or a great-man.But my talent is around me,who gives me more love than others.She is my mother,the talent in my heart(高分句型一).My mother isn't great in the way of a famous singer or a movie star.She does nothing big,but what she does make others inferior.From her,I learn a lot.
When I was a baby,she taught me how to walk and how to speak.When I go to school,she helps me solve many problems.She also tells me be kind to others.When I do badly in study,she encourages me and tries to cheer me up.My mother is a teacher,and she is always busy with her work.When she corrects students'homework,she is always very serious.My mother is responsible to all of her students.She cares much about students study and life,and she tries her best to help students in need(高分句型二).
My mother is a loving mother,a qualified teacher,and a real talent in my heart.
点评 这是一篇开放式作文,写作时不要仅仅对要点进行生硬的翻译,而是要添加些内容,使文章看起来更充实,要组成一篇通顺连贯的短文.需要注意紧扣文章主题,给出的要点都需要包括,缺一不可.尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次.
