Question

【题目】书面表达

你的周围有一些高效能的同学，他们表现突出，这与他们良好的习惯是分不开的。请就此话题用英语写一篇100-120个词的短文，举例说明他们的良好习惯，并谈谈你的看法。

参考词汇：efficient .adj ; 有效率的； efficiency .n 效率

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Answer 1

【答案】

One possible student version:

Some students have always been very efficient at schoolwork, among whom, Li, monitor of our class, is an example. He distinguishes himself as the most productive student in the class.

When asked why he is always so productive, Li responded that it was some good habits that benefited him greatly and enabled him to be quite effective at schoolwork. Li always has a strictly followed plan, for he believes that efficiency depends on good organization. Besides, he makes full use of his time. He listens attentively and takes notes at class, keeping close pace with the teacher. After class, he not only finishes the homework but also makes sure that consolidation work has been done. Moreover, he attaches great importance to critical thinking, with which he never accepts anything blindly.

From Li we can learn that a student’s good performance and success is closely connected with his good habits. Good habits are very important. We may benefit in them or suffer from the absence of them.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇观点陈述类写作。这篇作文有这样几个要点：第一，谈周围高效人士的良好习惯并列举事例；第二；谈自己的观点；第三，字数要求字数为100-120个字，不足或超过都要扣分。亮点分析：结构上采用黄金三段式，使得结构清晰，一目了然。文章采用了许多好的句型，When asked why he is always so productive, Li responded that it was some good habits that benefited him greatly and enabled him to be quite effective at schoolwork这个句子中用了省略主语的分词结构，时间状语包含原因状语的复合句，responded引导的宾语从句和it was some good habits that强调句型的符合；he not only finishes the homework but also makes sure that consolidation work has been done中not only…but also句型中嵌套的that引导的宾语从句；he attaches great importance to critical thinking, with which he never accepts anything blindly. 中非限制性定语从句的运用，复合句的多重使用使得本文内容充实；本文还运用了许多好的词汇和短语，如distinguish… as，enable… to be，makes full use of，keeping close pace with，attentively，attaches great importance to等，体现了作者厚实的基础。