Question

【题目】假设你校将为学生开设以下课程：野外拓展 (Outward bound training)；口才训练 (Eloquence training)；礼仪培训 (Etiquette training)；职业培训 (Vocational training)。请根据你的自身特点和需求选择其中的一个课程，并简要谈谈你选择这个课程的理由。

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【答案】

I am so excited to learn that there will be four new training courses available for students this semester. Concerning Outward bound, Eloquence, Etiquette and Vocation, I won’t hesitate to choose Outward bound training. Not only is it because I am active and lively, but also that it can effectively improve physical ability, perseverance, wisdom, communication and other aspects of the quality.

First and foremost, students’ psychological quality education is more and more highly valued by the community, because this issue has become a prominent factor affecting health and stability of talent. Most projects of Outward Bound are designed to improve the quality of people’s psychology, to improve self-control ability of students to continually overcome the psychological fear, to challenge themselves, overcome themselves and shape the good will quality of calm, resolute, indomitable.

In addition, Outward Bound can cultivate students’ sense of team work. In modern society, the era of relying on one person to conquer the world has passed. Success requires cooperation, needs every member of the team in a positive understanding of each other. Outward Bound has a lot of teamwork needed to complete the project, such as “survival”, “canned shoes”. A person’s power is limited, but when integrated into the team, if everyone can play their strengths, them the whole team can complete the task that individual can't complete.

Obviously, Outward Bound can achieve educational goals of psychological and social adaptation, which , for the long run, pays off and benefits us for a life-long term.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于提纲式作文。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如Not only is it because I am active and lively, but also that it can effectively improve physical ability, perseverance, wisdom, communication and other aspects of the quality用了倒装和强调句。if everyone can play their strengths, them the whole team can complete the task that individual can't complete.这句话是状语从句。此外，文章还使用了大量短语 hesitate to do, be designed to do 等。First and foremost, in addition的使用使文章内容更具有层次感，也使语言更加连贯。