Question

【题目】假设你是李越，请给张老师(Mr. / Ms. Zhang)写一封100-120个词的英文信。根据你的情况，告诉老师你希望在英语写作方面得到帮助。你可以希望老师着重纠正语言错误，也可以希望老师在作文结构方面给予指导，并说明你的理由。

注意：1. 信的抬头与落款已给出（不计入词数）；

2. 不得以任何形式透露地区、学校、姓名等真实信息。否则，视为考试作弊。

Dear Mr. / Ms. Zhang,

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Yours sincerely,

Li Yue

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mr. / Ms. Zhang,

I’m writing to let you know that I need your help with my English writing. As is known to all, grammar plays a very important part in language communication. But I feel that I have problems with my grammar. I’m afraid that I’m not able to identify the specific errors on my own. I’d be grateful if you could point out and correct my grammar errors. What’s more, I’m used to the Chinese way of thinking, which keeps me from organizing my ideas in a proper way. I was wondering if you could also help me improve the structure of my writing.

I’m looking forward to making great progress under your instructions. Thank you in advance!

Yours sincerely,

Li Yue

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达是要求写一封信，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、仔细研读题目所给信息，不要误解信息，也不要漏掉要点，明确自己是以哪个身份来写这封信。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构，符合书信口吻和语气。词汇短语丰富，如As is known to all众所周知，identify the specific errors确认科学性的错误。有高级句式，如What’s more, I’m used to the Chinese way of thinking, which keeps me from organizing my ideas in a proper way.用到了非限制性定语从句。