Question

13．假设你是李津，在十一旅游期间入住北京友谊宾馆702房间，10月2日入住，10月6日退房．你回家后发现一个中等大小的蓝色皮背包遗失在哪里，内有几本学习参考书，一个白色ipad，一张信用卡和少量现金．请用英文给该宾馆外籍经理写一封email，请他帮忙寻找并寄回．
信件要点包括：
1．陈述写信原因；
2．简要描述该背包；
3．说明其重要性；
4．期待回复．
注意：1．词数：不少于100；
2．可适当增加细节，使内容充实、行文连贯；
3．开头、结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Sir，
I'm so grateful for your good service during my stay in Beijing for a tour，but I'm writing to ask a favour to find and send back my pack which I left in your hotel．（高分句型一）
I checked in on Oct.2 and out on Oct.6．Setting off in a rush for the station，I left the pack in Room 702．It's a medium-sized，blue，leather backpack which contains some reference books，a white ipad，a credit card and some cash．All in the pack matters to me，especially the ipad，a precious gift from my father on my 18^thbirthday．So much did I cherish it that I feel upset for its loss．（高分句型二）
If you find it，would you please post it to me？The return address is at the end of the letter．
I'll appreciate it very much if you can give me your earliest reply．（高分句型三）
Yours sincerely，
Li Jin
Yours sincerely，
Li Jin．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来．本文的要点要考生自己稍加补充．具体可在重要性方面加强说明，故需要准确表达．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：1．be grateful for"因…而感激"；2．ask a favor to do sth．"请求帮忙做某事"；3．check in"登机；登记入住"；4．check out"结账离开，退房"；5．in a rush"匆匆忙忙地"；6．matter to"对…重要"
 I'm so grateful for your good service during my stay in Beijing for a tour，but I'm writing to ask a favour to find and send back my pack which I left in your hotel．（高分句型一）
So much did I cherish it that I feel upset for its loss．（高分句型二）
 I'll appreciate it very much if you can give me your earliest reply．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir，
    I'm so grateful for your good service during my stay in Beijing for a tour，but I'm writing to ask a favour to find and send back my pack which I left in your hotel．（高分句型一）
    I checked in on Oct.2 and out on Oct.6．Setting off in a rush for the station，I left the pack in Room 702．It's a medium-sized，blue，leather backpack which contains some reference books，a white ipad，a credit card and some cash．All in the pack matters to me，especially the ipad，a precious gift from my father on my 18^th birthday．So much did I cherish it that I feel upset for its loss．（高分句型二）
    If you find it，would you please post it to me？The return address is at the end of the letter．
    I'll appreciate it very much if you can give me your earliest reply．（高分句型三）
                                                                                                                                                         Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                            Li Jin

点评 本文属于提纲类作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果．