题目内容
16.假设你是红星中学高三学生李华.根据提示,给你的美国朋友Jim写一封感谢信,感谢你在美国游学期间对你的帮助.1.写出写信目的.2.阐述感谢的原因.3.再次表达感谢,并可表述希望有机会可以给对方回报.
注意:1.词数不少于50; 2.开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数.
Dear Jim,
I'm writing to express my thanks for your help during my stay in the USA.I've been back home safely but I am still lost in the good days spent togeter with you and your family.
I'm really grateful for your good care and kind help in America.Arriving there,my language was not very good,and do you still remember you help me with my presentation on Mr.Donald's lecture?Without your help with my language,I must have fooled myself.Besides this,you took me out to so many places of interests,which brought me a great grasp of ancient and present-day America.The most touching and warmest experience was having met and stayed with your family,which is a democratic,open,friendly and encouraging family.I have to say that I love you all from the bottom of my heart.
I can't thank you more,and I hope in the near future you'd like to visit Beijing,China.Then,I can try my best to pay you back.I'd like to introduce you to all my family and friends,and I'm hoping to take you to the Great Wall,one of the seven wonders in the world.
I'm looking forward to your reply.Wish you good luck!
Yours,
Li Hua.
分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文,根据提示信息根据提示,给你的美国朋友Jim写一封感谢信,感谢你在美国游学期间对你的帮助.写作时注意以下几点:1、仔细阅读有关提示,弄清试题提供的所有信息,明确几个要点:写出写信目的;阐述感谢的原因;再次表达感谢,并可表述希望有机会可以给对方回报.2、提纲是文章的总体框架,要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象.要依据提示情景或词语,按照一定逻辑关系来写.3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态;就本文而言应该用一般现在时态.4.注意使用高级词汇和句式,以增加文章的亮点.
(高级句型一)Arriving there,my language was not very good…
该句使用了现在分词做状语,表示伴随状况;
(高级句型二)you took me out to so many places of interests,which brought me a great grasp of ancient and present-day America..
which是 一个非限制性定语从句,做主语;
(高级句型三)I can't thank you more..
该句式里cannot否定词和比较级more连用表示的最高级;
高级词汇:am still lost in 沉浸在…;fool愚弄;
解答 Dear Jim,
I'm writing to express my thanks for your help during my stay in the USA.I've been back home safely but I am still lost in the good days spent togeter with you and your family.(介绍写信的目的)
I'm really grateful for your good care and kind help in America.(高级句型一)Arriving there,my language was not very good,and do you still remember you help me with my presentation on Mr.Donald's lecture?Without your help with my language,I must have fooled myself.Besides this,(高级句型二)you took me out to so many places of interests,which brought me a great grasp of ancient and present-day America.The most touching and warmest experience was having met and stayed with your family,which is a democratic,open,friendly and encouraging family.I have to say that I love you all from the bottom of my heart.(解释感谢的原因)
(高级句型三)I can't thank you more,and I hope in the near future you'd like to visit Beijing,China.Then,I can try my best to pay you back.I'd like to introduce you to all my family and friends,and I'm hoping to take you to the Great Wall,one of the seven wonders in the world.(再次表示感谢)
I'm looking forward to your reply.Wish you good luck!
Yours,
Li Hua.
点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点.写作时注意准确运用时态,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系,尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式,同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次,平时需注意积累短语和重要句型.