Question

18．Directions：Write an English composition in 120-150 words according to the instructions given below in Chinese．
最近某学校在学生中做了一次"有烦恼向谁说？"的调查，调查结果如图表示．请你简要描述调查结果，并谈谈你自己的想法．

I am a Senior Three student．Recently we have carried out a survey--"who to share my worry？"The main findings are as follows．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
Nevertheless（1），there are also 58% who don't share their troubles at all（2），preferring to （3）work on themselves．然而，有58%的人根本不与他人诉说困难，宁愿独自承担．
（1）neverthless然而，关联词，承接上下文使文章流畅，逻辑显然．
（2）who引导了定语从句，以58%为先行词，表示"58%的根本不与他人诉说困难的人"．
（3）preferring是现在分词做伴随状语，书面表达中运用分词做状语总是吸引眼球的亮点．
句型二：
I feel it's quite natural to use these three ways to deal with personal affairs（1），but what surprises me most（2）is the proportion each part takes我觉得用这三种方法解决个人问题很自然，但是最使我惊讶的是每一部分所占的比例．
（1）It's quite natural to use these three ways…，该句中it充当了形式主语，真正的主语是动词不定式to use these three ways；
（2）what surprised me most是what 引导的主语从句，what 在主语从句中充当主语．
句型三：
 It seems rather common for the students nowadays to choose to keep their mouths shut rather than （1）to turn to someone else when in trouble（2）在困境中时现在的学生选择闭嘴而不向他人求助似乎相当普遍．
（1）rather than而非，而不；前后往往用并列的形式进行对照，表达强烈的语气；
（2）when in trouble表示"在困境中时"，是省略的状语从句，完整的句子是when they are in trouble；状语从句中常常可以同时省略与主句相同的主语和be动词，使得句子更简练．

解答 I am a Senior Three student．Recently we have carried out a survey--"who to share my worry？"The main findings are as follows．
      9% of the students surveyed select friends or school-mates as their ideal listeners when having trouble while another 33% tend to seek advice from teachers and parents．Nevertheless，there are also 58% who don't share their troubles at all，preferring to work on themselves【高分句型一】（图片描述）．
    Personally speaking，I feel it's quite natural to use these three ways to deal with personal affairs，but what surprises me most is the proportion each part takes【高分句型二】．My first reaction to the survey results is"shock"．It seems rather common for the students nowadays to choose to keep their mouths shut rather than to turn to someone else when in trouble【高分句型三】．Is it so hard for them to place trust in others？After having a second thought，I realize that we teenagers may be more independent，thoughtful and strong-minded than our parents and teachers expect us to be，as we have easy access to the online information we need-either by a computer or a mobile phone-to handle our worry properly in daily life（自己的看法）．

点评 写作时首先审题要到位：审体裁、人称和时态；审要点，根据题目的要求审要点，要点要包括文字中的要点，也要包括图片或表格中的主要信息．其次要考虑词语和句型的选用，词语和句型的选用要包含作者的感情色彩和增强表达的气势；再次，运用关联词如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流畅．