Question

8．假定英语课上老师要求同桌之间交换修改作文，请你修改你同桌写的以下作文．文中共有10处语言错误，每句中最多有两处，每处错误仅涉及一个单词的增加、删除或修改．增加：在缺词处加一个漏字符号（∧），并在其下面写出该加的词．删除：把多余的词用斜线（\）划掉．修改：在错的词下划一横线，并在该词下面写出修改后的词．注意：1．每处错误及其修改均限一词． 2．只允许修改10处，多者（从第11处起）不计分．
Once，when l was a teenager，my father and I were standing in line to buy ticket for the circus．Finally，there was only one family among us and the ticket counter．This family made deep impression on me．There were eight children，both probably under the age of twelve．You could tell they didn't have a lot of money．Their clothes was not expensive，and they were clean．The children were well-behaved，all of them standing in line，two-by-two behind their parents，held hands．They were excitedly talking about the clowns，elephants and other performances what they would see that night．Everyone could sense that they have never been to the circus ago．

Answer 1

分析 本文主要讲述作者和父亲买票看马戏时发生的故事．这是一个有着八个孩子的家庭，父母带孩子们去看马戏，都可能在十二岁以下．他们肯定没有许多钱，虽然他们穿的衣服不贵，但很干净．最后这家人如愿以偿的看上了马戏．

解答 Once，when l was a teenager，my father and I were standing in line to buy ticket for the circus．Finally，there was only one family among us and the ticket counter．This family made∧deep impression on me．There were eight children，both probably under the age of twelve．You could tell they didn't have a lot of money．Their clothes was not expensive，and they were clean．The children were well-behaved，all of them standing in line，two-by-two behind their parents，held hands．They were excitedly talking about the clowns，elephants and other performances what they would see that night．Everyone could sense that theyhave never been to the circus ago．
详解：
1．ticket改为tictets 考查名词复数．ticket是可数名词，根据上下文语境要用复数形式．
2．among改为between 考查介词．between一般指"两者之间"，而among用于三个或三个以上的人或物之中，或笼统的一群人或一些物之中，表示"在…中间"．此处应是：两者之间．
3．加a 考查冠词．impression是可数名词，单数形式前加不定冠词a表示泛指．
4．both改为all 考查代词．根据前文eight children，要用all指代，both指代两者．
5．was改为were 考查主谓一致．主语clothes表示复数概念，谓语动词也要用复数形式were．
6．and改为but 考查连词．前后两个分句之间表示转折关系而非并列关系，用连词but．
7．去掉were 考查动词语态．behave是不及物动词，没有被语态，were是多余的，要去掉．
8．what改为which/that或去掉what 考查定语从句．分析句子结构可知这是一个定语从句，先行词the clowns，elephants and other performances在从句中作see的宾语，用关系代词which/that．关系代词在定语从句中作宾语时也可省略，即去掉what．
9．have改为had 考查动词时态．sense后接的宾语从句中动作发生在主句动作之前，即"过去的过去"，要用过去完成时态．
10．ago改为before 考查副词．ago表示"从现在起的若干时间以前"，意思是"距今…以前"，需和过去时或过去进行时连用．before泛指"从过去起的若干时间以前"，意思是"距过去某时…以前"，常和完成时连用，尤其在间接引语中．

点评 高考短文改错题的形式有说明文，短文故事，书信等，具有很强的实用性．短文的内容和语言都符合高中学生的实际，从表面上看类似一篇学生习作．首先，通读全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的时态、人称及行文逻辑，在通读全文时把一些容易的错误先改好，再进行逐句改错．其次，要进行逐个句子的改错．这是要对文中的词法、句法和语篇着重分析和特别注意．最后把改好的短文再阅读一遍，检查答案是否正确，感觉是否还有不妥之处，最终形成定稿．