Question

6．假设你是李华，是校英语俱乐部的成员．英语俱乐部下次交流的话题是My Hero，请你写一篇英语发言稿，介绍你班身残志坚的同学--王跃．内容包括：
1．他不能正常地走路；
2．他对待生活和学习的态度；
3．你敬佩他的原因．
注意：1．词数120左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear friends，
     ．
That's all．Thank you．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假设你是李华，是校英语俱乐部的成员．英语俱乐部下次交流的话题是My Hero，请你写一篇英语发言稿，介绍你班身残志坚的同学--王跃，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：他不能正常地走路；他对待生活和学习的态度；你敬佩他的原因．
 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：share sth with sb和某人分享某事，suffered from遭受，As a result结果，inspire激励，come true实现，which made him unable to walk normally．是一句定语从句，His ambition is to become a scientist when he grows up．是一句时间状语从句．
When Wang Yue was born，he suffered from a rare disease，which made him unable to walk normally．（高分句型一）
 Wang Yue is my hero because he never gives up his dream although he has a physical disability．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear friends，
      My name is Li Hua．I would like to share my hero with you，one of my classmates named Wang Yue．
      When Wang Yue was born，he suffered from a rare disease，which made him unable to walk normally．（高分句型一）As a result，he has to sit in a wheelchair all day．However，Wang Yue stays positive about life．He works hard at his lessons because he has a big dream．His ambition is to become a scientist when he grows up．
      Wang Yue is my hero because he never gives up his dream although he has a physical disability．（高分句型二）His example inspires us to try our best to make our dream come true．
      That's all．Thank you．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．