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13．假如你是光明中学高一学生李明，澳大利亚环保协会组织一次为期两周的"澳大利亚生态游"活动，作为一名环保志愿者，希望得到这次机会．请按以下提示向该组织写一封申请信：
1．个人情况介绍（如性格，业余爱好，语言优势等）
2．申请理由（参观野生动物自然保护区，了解澳大利亚环保情况）
3．对本次活动的期待…
注意：1．字数100字左右，信的开头和结尾已给出．（不记入总字数）
2．可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯．
Dear Sir，
I feel delighted to know that Australian Environmental Council will host a two-week eco-tour to Australia．As an environmental volunteer，I                       

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分析 本题是一篇书信类作文，主要的要求有：1．个人情况介绍（如性格，业余爱好，语言优势等）2．申请理由（参观野生动物自然保护区，了解澳大利亚环保情况）3．对本次活动的期待…需要注意：1．字数100字左右，信的开头和结尾已给出．（不记入总字数） 2．可适当加入细节，使内容充实，行文连贯．
亮点说明：本题运用了多段描写的方式，写出了文章所需要的要点．用了一般现在时，现在完成时，一般过去时等时态，条理清楚，表达简洁不啰嗦．是一篇不错的文章，而且错误很少．
As an environmental volunteer，I sincerely want to take part in this activity and introduce myself as follows：（高分句型）
What interests me most is eco-tour．I have taken part in many activities，which give me a deep impression．（高分句型）
And I hope I'll have the chance to pay a visit to the wildlife nature reserves and have a better understanding of environment protection（高分句型）．

解答 I feel delighted to know that Australian Environmental Council will host a two-week eco-tour to Australia．As an environmental volunteer，I sincerely want to take part in this activity and introduce myself as follows：（高分句型）
   I'm a senior one student，studying in Guangming High School．I'm an easy-going and hard-working boy．What interests me most is eco-tour．I have taken part in many activities，which give me a deep impression．（高分句型）At the same time I can speak English fluently and can easily communicate with local people．
    The aim to apply for this activity is to understand how to develop eco-tour in Australia．And I hope I'll have the chance to pay a visit to the wildlife nature reserves and have a better understanding of environment protection（高分句型）．I'm sure I will benefit a lot from this two-week eco-tour．I'd appreciate it if you can take my application into consideration．
   Look forward to hearing your reply．
                                                          Yours，
                                                            Li Ming

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．