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2．假如你是李华，寒假在美国旅行时，住在好友Jack家，回国时将买给朋友的礼物遗忘在了Jack家中．请根据以下要点，给Jack写信，请他帮忙把礼物寄回来．
（1）感谢他的照顾；
（2）描述遗忘的礼物（位置、特点等）；
（3）请Jack帮忙尽快寄回．
要求：（1）可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（2）词数：100词左右；
（3）邮件的开头和结尾已经给出，不计入总词数．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息寒假在美国旅行时，住在好友Jack家，回国时将买给朋友的礼物遗忘在了Jack家中．请根据以下要点，给Jack写信，请他帮忙把礼物寄回来．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：（1）感谢他的照顾；（2）描述遗忘的礼物（位置、特点等）；（3）请Jack帮忙尽快寄回．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：have A wonderful time过的非常愉快；do me a favor帮我一下；as soon as possible尽可能的快；The reason I'm writing to you is that I wonder if you could do me a favor．（高分句型一）I left so hurriedly that an important present I bought for a friend of mine was left behind in the room where I stayed．（高分句型二）
I would appreciate it if you could mail it to me as soon as possible．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Jack，
       How is everything going？Thank you for your warm reception during my visit to America．I really had a wonderful time staying at your home．
      The reason I'm writing to you is that I wonder if you could do me a favor．（高分句型一）I left so hurriedly that an important present I bought for a friend of mine was left behind in the room where I stayed．（高分句型二）It was packed in a small red box and was probably put on the bookshelf．I would appreciate it if you could mail it to me as soon as possible．（高分句型三）I hope you can come to China when it is convenient to you．And I will be glad to be your guide．
       Best wishes．
                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours truly，
                                                                                                                                                                                            Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．