题目内容
【题目】假设你是李华,你高中毕业后被北京大学录取。在收到录取通知书之际,你给你的外教Mr. Smith写一封信,告诉他这个好消息并表示感谢。信的内容包括:
1.感谢他三年来对你的关怀和照顾;
2.感谢他对你英语学习的指导;
3.祝老师身体健康、工作顺利。
注意:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 不得在文中透露个人信息;
3. 可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯。
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【答案】Dear Mr. Smith,
I am glad to tell you that I have been admitted to Peking University. At this moment, I want to express my gratitude to you.
Looking back to my senior high school life, you encouraged me many times and built up my confidence whenever I met with difficulties. I used to be poor at my English, and there was a time when I decided to give it up. It was your advice that made me change my mind and begin to learn English harder than ever. Without your care, I wouldn't have been admitted into Beijing University.
Words can't express my thanks to you. Here I sincerely hope that you are in good health and work happily every day.
Yours Sincerely,
Li Hua
【解析】本文书面表达属于应用文,要求写一封书信。
第1步:根据提示可知,本篇是一篇书信:你高中毕业后被北京大学录取。在收到录取通知书之际,你给你的外教Mr. Smith写一封信,告诉他这个好消息并表示感谢。信的内容包括:感谢他三年来对你的关怀和照顾;感谢他对你英语学习的指导;祝老师身体健康、工作顺利。
第2步:根据写作要求确定关键词,如:have been admitted to Peking University.(已经被北京大学录取);to express my gratitude to you.(表达对你的感激);built up my confidence(增强我的自信);used to be poor at my English,(过去我的英语差)等。
第3步:根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态语态问题。
第4步:连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰,保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。
本文内容完整,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。
【亮点说明】
本文是一封书信,格式正确,内容符合要求,结构布局合理,文中使用高级句子。I am glad to tell you that I have been admitted to Peking University.句中that引导宾语从句;Looking back to my senior high school life, you encouraged me many times and built up my confidence whenever I met with difficulties.句中现在分词做时间状语,whenever引导时间状语从句;and there was a time when I decided to give it up.句中when引导定语从句;It was your advice that made me change my mind and begin to learn English harder than ever.强调句式使用经典;Without your care, I wouldn't have been admitted into Beijing University.虚拟语气运用恰到好处。