题目内容
【题目】书面表达
假定你是李华,暑假想去一家外贸公司兼职,已写好申请书和个人简历(resume)。给外教Ms Jenkins 写信,请她帮你修改所附材料的文字和格式(format)。
注意:
1. 词数100左右;
2. 可以适当增加细节,已使行文连贯。
【答案】
Dear Ms Jenkins,
I am Li Hua. I am writing to tell you something about my plan for the coming summer vacation and I also want you to do me a favor.
In order to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign capital company. I have already finished my job application and personal resume. But this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume, so I don’t even know if there are something to pay attention to. So, I’m writing you the letter , hoping you can give me some help. I will be very grateful if you can help me.
Looking forward to your reply. And I’d be really thankful.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
【试题分析】本文是一篇考生们熟悉的书信类体裁的书面表达,内容贴近学生生活,所以人人有话可说。文章没有给出开头和结尾,所以考生要注意书信的格式,包括称呼语,正文以及结束语等。在写作时要注意先列出写作要点,而且要注意将来时、现在时以及现在完成时的交错使用;注意使用高级句式和多种结构的使用,而且语气要委婉礼貌。
【亮点】 本文是一篇较为优秀的范文。格式正确,要点全面,语言通顺流畅,很好地完成了写作任务。在本文中开头提出写信的目的,然后具体讲述自己的困难,再提出请求,最后表达自己的感激之情。所以在内容上逻辑性较强。此外,作者还使用了不定式短语In order to get some practical experience, 现在分词短语hoping you can give me some help, 宾语从句if there are something to pay attention to等。经典句式this is the first time that I have written an application and the personal resume也是文章的亮点所在。
