Question

【题目】假如你是李华。你参加了学校刚刚组织的英语口语大赛，并获得了一等奖，在座的评委 Ms.Monica 对你的表现进行了点评并给予了充分肯定，同时鼓励你继续努力。现在你想给她写封 email。

要求：1.词数100左右。2. 开头和结尾已经为你写好，不计人总词数。3. 可以适当增加细节，使内容更加连贯。

Dear Monica,

I am Li Hua.

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We are looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Monica,

I am Li Hua. Thanks for your encouraging comments on my performance at the English Oral Contest. I am so proud to have got the first prize in it. But I have some more problems in English study and I would like you to give me some further advice.

I have been frustrated with English composition. My English teacher always says that I should first make an outline before writing. But I have always been wondering how to do that, so I would appreciate it if you could offer me some valuable suggestions.

By the way, the Chinese New Year is coming. My parents and I feel like inviting you to our home to enjoy this festival. We would be so happy if you could accept this invitation.

We are looking forward to your reply.

【解析】试题分析：本篇书面表达要求写一封电子邮件。内容包括：假如你是李华。你参加了学校刚刚组织的英语口语大赛，并获得了一等奖，在座的评委 Ms.Monica 对你的表现进行了点评并给予了充分肯定，同时鼓励你继续努力。要点较多，在写作时注意不要遗漏要点，同时还需要对要点进行细节上的补充，以使文章内容丰富，上下衔接。其次，注意时态选择上要使用一般现在时。最后，文章要注意语言简练、用词准确。

【亮点说明】本篇范文结构紧凑，要点全面。文中运用了大量的短语，比如comment on；be proud to；be frustrated with；by the way；feel like等。还运用了一些高级句法，如But I have always been wondering how to do that, so I would appreciate it if you could offer me some valuable suggestions.这句话运用了宾语从句。最后，文章注意了语句的衔接，如but；and；so；if等连接词起到很好的连接上下文的作用，使文章读起来自然流畅，朗朗上口。