Question

【题目】【2015·四川】

假如你是李夏。你看到美国留学生Sharon 在网上发贴，.希望有人能帮助她提高普通话（Mandarin）水平，她可以教英语作为回报。请根据以下提示用英语给她写一封电子邮件。

1. 表达给她提供帮助的意愿；

2. 说明你能胜任辅导的理由；

3. 给出讲好普通话的两点建议；

4. 提出你学习英语的具体需求。

注意：

1. 词数120左右，开头语已为你写好；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3. 文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

Hi Sharon,

This is Li Xia. I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarm

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Answer 1

【答案】

Hi Sharon,

This is Li Xia. I learned from your post that you want to improve your Mandarin. I am quite interested in it . I think I’m fit for it. As a student, I have been learning Mandarin for many years. In addition ,I am Chinese, which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life. So I’m quite confident thatI can help you learn Mandarin.

Learning Mandarin takes time, so if you want to learn it well ,you should spend much time practicing Mandarin everyday. As the saying goes, practice makes perfect. Besides, you can also read some books in Chinese、see some Chinese films and listen to some Chinese radio programmes. Speaking and listening are very important for a language learning, by which you are sure to make great progress.

In your post, you say you can teach English as a reward. It is just what I want. I’m eager to improve my English. So, if you allow me to help you learn Mandarin, you can also help me improve my English.We can contact each other by video chat every night for half an hour in English and half an hour in Chinese, so that we can improve our oral speaking.

Hope for you early reply!

Yours Sincerely

Li Xia

【解析】

试题分析：考查提纲类作文。提纲作文在写作时需要注意以下几个方面：首先需要审题。即：审要求、审文体、审人称、审时态。其次，考生要能够抓中心，列要点，列出写作提纲。 写作文时，一定要切题，抓住中心，紧扣要点。然后在体裁明确、中心突出、要点清晰的前提下，考生应该选择自己最熟悉、最有把握的词语、句型，将要点逐条表达出来。最后根据要点选词组句，然后按照篇章结构连句成篇。本篇文章的要点具体，可分成三段写，第一段写要点1、2；第二段写要点3；第三段写要点4，以及希望得到对方的回信。

【亮点说明】本文要点齐全，结构完整。使用多种句式，如定语从句：I am Chinese, which means Mandarin is a must for me to communicate with others in my daily life.、表语从句：It is just what I want.等。还使用了大量短语等。