Question

4．现在，很多中学生被近视困扰，请就此现象写一篇短文谈谈你的看法．
   内容包括：1．造成近视的原因；
            2．近视对学习或生活的影响；
            3．你认为应该如何保护视力？（至少两条建议）
要求：1．字数80-100字．开头已给出，不计入总字数．
     2．文中不得出现真实的校名与人名．
参考词汇：eyesight   n．视力              nearsighted  adj．近视的
       have good eyesight   视力好      have bad eyesight  视力差．

Answer 1

分析 本篇短文是要你谈谈对中学生近视这一现象的看法，属于议论文，在写作的时候，以一般现在时态为主，其中要点要包括：1．造成近视的原因．2．对生活和学习有什么影响．3．如何保护视力．写作过程中可以把第一和第二个要点合在一块分析，说完了一个原因，接着说近视的不方便之处，更自然．

解答 【参考范文一】
   Quite a lot of students have become nearsighted now．I think the main reason is that students don't have a good habit while studying．Bad eyesight brings trouble to our life and study．For example，if we leave our glasses at home，we can't take notes in class．We will feel uncomfortable when we swim with glasses．Here is my advice：on the one hand，teenagers shouldn't study for hours without breaks because our eyes need to relax．On the other hand，having sports and doing eye exercise are also helpful．
    It's very important to have good eyesight．So let's take good care of our eyes．

【参考范文二】
   Quite a lot of students have become nearsighted now．There are many reasons．Some students often play computer games for
long．Some keep their eyes too close to the books while reading and some often read in poor light．
   If we are nearsighted，you may lose some good chances for your dream jobs like pilots and policemen．So it's important to protect your eyes．First，you shouldn't play computer games or watch TV too much．Second，you'd better take  breaks after reading or doing homework for a long time．Third，you're supposed to do eye exercises regularly．If you can do like this，you will have a good eyesigt!

点评 以提纲提供情景的作文．要注意遣词造句的灵活性和语法规则的正确性，就不会造成审题不清而偏离主题，但要注意，文章必须覆盖所提供的各个提纲的要点．行文间要注意简化描述，用简短的语句代替冗长的语句．在作文完成的时候，应该检查、修改，以免遗漏一些需要表达清楚的要点和细节．