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根据下面提供的材料写一篇短文．

在冬季的一天，李雷来你家玩，你们谈论起了天气，并把我国的冬季同澳大利亚这时的天气状况进行了对比．(要求：80词左右)

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学生：习作： A Winter Day 　　Last Sunday was a fine day. My friend Li Lei came to my house. He were a(X1) thick clothes, He heard from his penfriend in Australia yesterday. Li Lei said. “The weather of Australia is different from China(X2). It is summer new. It rains big(X3). How cold it is now in China! The day is getting short and short(X4) Look! It's snowing! A timely snow promises a good harvest”. “Oh, yes, what are the farmers doing now?” I asked. “They are very busy, getting ready for next year(X5), aren't they?” 　　We talked everything about winter. Through the window, I could see it snowing quietly. 　　剖析：1．clothes是复数形式，前面不能用a或an． 　　2．只有相同类型的事物才能进行比较，这里所比较的是“天气”，所以应把China改为that of China，其中that是替代词，它代替前面的weather． 　　3．形容雨、雪下得大，不能用形容词big，而应该用副词heavily修饰动词rain． 　　4．表示“越来越……”应该用“比较级+and+比较级”形式，所以要改为“shorter and shorter”． 　　5．next year为“明年”，the next year为“第二年”，此处是泛指第二年，应加上定冠词the． 　　总评：行文流畅，语言简练，运用语言描写，从侧面向读者展示了一幅冬天的画卷，同时也介绍了澳洲与我国的季节反差，成功地用了“瑞雪兆丰年”的农谚，表达了自己美好的愿望．但在某些语法方面，还有一些错误．